Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example or reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea (tidy/own place) and phrasing like "it's OK" multiple times. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "organised," "clutter-free") and keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like to keep my home organised because clutter distracts me. For example, I always put books back on the shelf and clear the kitchen each evening, which helps me relax. However, if I'm busy I won't worry about minor messes for a few hours.

제안: Avoid idiomatic phrases that sound negative about family members (e.g., "control freak"). Start with a clear topic sentence, give one concrete childhood example, link to how it affects you now, and keep it to 2–3 sentences. Use neutral vocabulary like "strict" or "very particular."

예시: Yes, I did. My mother was quite strict about tidiness, so we made our beds and put toys away every day, which taught me good habits. As a result, I prefer a tidy room now, although I don't insist on perfection.

× Yes, I do like to keep things tidy.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy.

The auxiliary 'do' is not necessary for affirmative statements in simple present; using 'do' for emphasis is possible but here it's redundant. Use the simple present 'I like' to sound natural.

× I like to have everything in order and things to be in their own place.

✓ I like to have everything in order and for things to be in their own place.

When linking two infinitive structures with 'and', the second should use the full infinitive form with 'for' if it has its own subject ('things'). Adding 'for' clarifies the subject of the infinitive phrase: 'for things to be...'.

× But I've learned that it's OK if it's not tidy all the time.

✓ But I've learned that it's OK if it's not tidy all the time.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present perfect 'I've learned' is appropriate for a life lesson with relevance to the present, and the conditional clause 'if it's not tidy' correctly uses the present simple. No change needed.

× It's OK to wait a couple of hours to wash the dishes or just the living room or anything like that.

✓ It's OK to wait a couple of hours to wash the dishes or to clean the living room, or to do other things like that.

The original mixes verbs and nouns inconsistently ('wash the dishes' vs 'just the living room'). To parallel structure, use similar verb phrases: 'to wash the dishes' and 'to clean the living room.' Also 'or anything like that' is vague; 'or to do other things like that' keeps parallelism and clarity.

× Yes I did, my mom was a real control freak so she always made us make the bed when we woke up and take away our toys and always clean our rooms each day.

✓ Yes, I did. My mom was a real control freak, so she always made us make the bed when we woke up, put away our toys, and clean our rooms every day.

Run-on sentence: needs punctuation (period and commas). 'Take away our toys' is incorrect collocation; use 'put away our toys.' Maintain past tense consistency: 'made us make,' 'put away,' and 'clean' (or 'keep clean') are acceptable; 'each day' is more natural as 'every day.'

× So maybe that's why I like it a bit tidy.

✓ So maybe that's why I like it a bit tidy.

This sentence is acceptable as is. The present simple 'I like' correctly expresses a habitual preference. No grammatical correction required.

× But I've learned that it is OK if it's not perfect all the time.

✓ But I've learned that it is OK if it's not perfect all the time.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present perfect 'I've learned' with the present conditional 'if it's not perfect' is appropriate. No change needed.