Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えをより明確で流暢にするために、まずは直接的なトピック文を述べ（例：Yes, I like to keep my things tidy.）、その後で具体的な補足を1〜2文で加えましょう。冗長な繰り返しを避け、文法的に正しい構造（主語＋動詞）を使ってください。また、リンク詞（for example, because, so）を使うと理由や例を自然につなげられます。具体的には、どのように整理するか（棚分け、ラベル付けなど）やその理由（落ち着く、見つけやすい）を短く述べてください。発音や流暢さの改善のために、短い練習文を何度か繰り返すことも有効です。

예시: Yes, I like to keep my things tidy. For example, I sort books, clothes and documents into different boxes and label them, so I can find things quickly. Keeping my room organized helps me feel less stressed and more focused.

제안: 過去の習慣について話すときは、過去形（used to / when I was a child / in primary school）を使って明確に述べ、理由や具体例を1文付け加えてください。現在の状態と混同しないようにし、文を完結に保ちましょう。リンク語（when, because, so）で因果関係を示すと話が自然になります。母親の言葉を引用する場合は簡潔な引用文を用い、最後の不完全な文を修正して完結させてください。

예시: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was in primary school. My mother often reminded me to tidy up, so I always put toys in boxes and made my bed every morning.

× Yes, I really like to be things, tidy my room, my room has many things, but I I'm really good at, I'm really good at sorting them.

✓ Yes, I really like to keep things tidy. My room has many things, but I'm really good at sorting them.

The original contains multiple issues: incorrect verb choice 'to be things' should be 'to keep things tidy' (verb selection and sentence structure). Comma splices create run-on sentences; break into separate sentences. Remove the repeated fragment 'I'm really good at' and place the object 'sorting them' directly after. Use contraction 'I'm' once. Suggestion: choose correct verbs ('keep' instead of 'be'), split ideas into clear sentences, and avoid repeating fragments. Grammar problem types applied: 4 (Modal verb usage) is not directly relevant; main issues fall under 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 6 (Present tense issue) for maintaining present simple 'like' and 'have'. In summary, correct to present simple and fix structure.

× Yes, since I was in a primary school, my room is very clean.

✓ Yes, since I was in primary school, my room was very clean when I was a child.

The use of 'since' with a past time needs consistent past reference. The student mixes past ('since I was') with present 'is'. For a childhood habit or state, use past tense 'was'. Also 'in a primary school' is unnatural; use 'in primary school' or 'was in primary school'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when referring to past periods and use natural prepositional phrase. Grammar problem types applied: 5 (Past tense issue) and 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) for 'in a primary school'.

× My mother always said to me that your room has many things, but they are really.

✓ My mother always said to me, 'Your room has too many things,' but I thought she was right.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear: 'but they are really' is a fragment. Also indirect speech should be reported properly. Use quotation or report clause: 'My mother always said to me that my room had too many things' (backshift to past) or keep quoted speech. Suggestion: complete the comparison or opinion after 'but' (e.g., 'but she was right' or 'but I didn't agree'). Also change 'your' to 'my' when reporting what she said to the speaker. Applied grammar problem types: 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns).