Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図は伝わるが、文法ミス、語順の乱れ、発音のつまずき（句読点の位置での途切れ）があり、流暢さが低下しています。改善点：1) 完全文を意識して主語と動詞を明確にする（例："Yes, I do."→次の説明は"I can't relax if my room is messy."など）。2) フィラー（uh）を減らし、短い自然な文をつなげる。3) 語彙を少し増やし"messy"や"cluttered"などを使う。4) 1〜2文で理由を述べ、最大5文以内に収める。

예시: Yes, I do. I can't relax when my room is messy, so I tidy it regularly. For example, I put things back in their place and clean the desk every evening to keep a comfortable environment.

제안: 答えは短く、根拠や具体例が欠けています。また不必要な語の途切れや文法の不備（"I was clever child"は冠詞欠如）が見られます。改善点：1) 直接的に答えた後に過去の習慣を示す詳細を1〜2文で加える（"used to"構文や頻度を示す）。2) 文法を正しくし、冠詞や時制に注意する（"I was a tidy child"等）。3) 具体例（何をしていたか）を入れて説得力を持たせる。

예시: Yes, I did. I used to tidy my room almost every day when I was a child. For example, I always put my toys in boxes and made my bed before breakfast.

× Yes, I do I. Can't spend a comfortable time if my room uh. Dirty.

✓ Yes, I do. I can't spend a comfortable time if my room is dirty.

The original contains sentence fragments and missing auxiliary verb 'is' before 'dirty.' Combine and reorder to form two clear sentences: 'Yes, I do.' and 'I can't spend a comfortable time if my room is dirty.' Use the auxiliary verb 'is' to link subject 'my room' with adjective 'dirty.' Also remove filler hesitations ('uh') and correct punctuation. Suggestion: Practice forming complete sentences with subject + auxiliary + complement, e.g., 'My room is messy' or 'I can't relax if my room is dirty.'

× Probably yes, I did. Uh. I was. Clever child.

✓ Probably yes, I did. I was a clever child.

The original has incorrect sentence fragmentation and missing article 'a' before 'clever child.' Also 'I was.' is an incomplete sentence. Combine to 'I was a clever child.' The past tense 'was' is correct for referring to childhood, but the noun phrase must include the indefinite article. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns: 'a clever child,' and avoid unnecessary pauses that break sentence structure.'