Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid tense errors and filler words. Use linking words (for example, because or but) to make your reason coherent. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t like going to parks as a child. Instead, I preferred going to the stadium because I enjoyed playing badminton with my friends. As a result, I rarely spent time on swings or playgrounds.

제안: Give a clear, well-formed topic sentence and add a specific reason or short example. Use correct tense and natural phrasing, and include a linking word such as because or when to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit when I want to relax and ride the swings because they help me unwind after a long day.

제안: Your answer is relevant but repetitive. Start with one clear sentence, then give two specific benefits with a linking word (for example, because or for instance). Use accurate articles and plural/singular forms (e.g., “an evening” not “a evening”). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide fresh air and a quiet space to exercise. For example, I could go for morning walks or take my children to play in the evenings.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. If you are satisfied with nearby parks, say so and give a short reason. Avoid grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing; use linking words such as because. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I don’t have a particular park I want to visit in the future because I’m satisfied with the parks near my home. They meet my needs for walking and relaxing, so I don’t feel the need to travel farther.

× No, as in child, I do not like to go into the park and play so far, so I love to go into the stadium and play, uh, badminton.

✓ No, when I was a child I did not like to go to parks and play; instead I preferred to go to the stadium and play badminton.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and mixed tenses (present "do not like" with "as in child") and unnecessary words like "so far" and filler "uh." Use a clear past-time clause "when I was a child," change verb to past simple "did not like," use correct preposition "to parks," and simplify structure to convey contrast with "instead." Avoid fillers and redundant words.

× Yes, sometime I like to go into the park whenever I wanted to have a ride of a swing.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like to go to the park whenever I want to have a ride on a swing.

Tense must be consistent: use present simple "want" to match "like." Use plural adverb "sometimes." Use correct prepositions: "go to the park" and "ride on a swing." Also use "a ride on a swing" instead of "a ride of a swing." Avoid mixing past "wanted" with present habitual actions.

× Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city, uh, as parks give you more fresh air and you can enjoy a evening or morning timing in the parks. So yes, so I would like to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to have more parks in my city, because parks give you more fresh air and you can enjoy an evening or morning in the parks. So yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Use the article "an" before vowel sound in "an evening." Remove filler "uh" and redundant words "timing." "Because" is a clearer conjunction than "as" in spoken answers. Also remove the repeated phrase "So yes, so." Keep articles consistent and eliminate redundancy.

× No, I don't want it to go into the any park in the future. I'm happy and satisfied with the parks near situated nearby my.

✓ No, I don't want to go to any other park in the future. I'm happy and satisfied with the parks situated near me.

Original has incorrect pronoun "it" and wrong word order "to go into the any park." Use "go to any other park" for natural English. The phrase "near situated nearby my" is ungrammatical; use "situated near me." Keep verbs infinitive "to go" without extraneous pronouns.