Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and accurate: use correct verb forms and possessives, avoid uncertain words like “supposedly,” and keep answers concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often walked me there on weekends, and we have many photos of family picnics. I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and watching other children play, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and clearer: correct tense and article usage (e.g., “go to the park”), avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “however,” “but”). Keep to maximum five sentences.

예시: Not much, because I'm very busy with work. However, I do try to visit the park on my days off to relax; for instance, I often read a book or go for a walk there to unwind.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve coherence: don’t repeat words (“another another”), use linking words properly, and give a clear opinion with a reason or plan. Use specific details rather than vague statements.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' well‑being. Since there are few parks here, I sometimes plan day trips to nearby cities that have larger parks to enjoy nature and fresh air.

제안: Improve grammar and conciseness: fix verb agreement (“gives us a chance”), remove duplicated phrases (“play to play”), and use linking words like “for example” correctly. Provide one clear specific detail about the park or activity.

예시: Yes, I’d love to visit a park with a large grassy area for picnics. For example, I imagine going there with friends to play games, relax on a blanket, and enjoy the fresh air, which would be a nice break from city life.

× My parent used to walk me to the park when I was a child and I still have many photos of our family out in there.

✓ My parents used to walk me to the park when I was a child and I still have many photos of our family out there.

'Parent' should be plural 'parents' to match the meaning (more than one parent). Remove the unnecessary word 'in' after 'out'; 'out there' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: use plural nouns to match intended meaning and check prepositional phrases.

× I supposedly enjoy playing in the playground and watching other family at the parks.

✓ I used to enjoy playing in the playground and watching other families at the parks.

'Supposedly' is incorrect for describing a past habitual action; use 'used to' for past habits. 'Family' should be plural 'families' when referring to other families. Also 'watching' is fine as gerund. Suggestion: for past habits, use 'used to' and ensure nouns match number.

× Well, not really. I really go to park this day because I'm quite busy with work.

✓ Well, not really. I don't really go to the park these days because I'm quite busy with work.

Missing auxiliary 'do' for negative present ('I don't really go') and article 'the' is required before 'park' when speaking generally about a specific place. 'This day' is unnatural; use 'these days' to indicate current habitual time. Suggestion: use correct negative structure and common time expressions.

× I would love to visit the park on my days off to relax, to read a book or go for a walk.

✓ I would love to visit the park on my days off to relax, read a book, or go for a walk.

Original sentence is largely correct but contains an unnecessary repeated 'to' before verbs in a list. Use parallel structure by omitting 'to' after the first verb. Suggestion: maintain parallelism in verb lists.

× Yeah, of course I would, but sadly my city doesn't have a lot of parks to see.

✓ Yeah, of course I would, but sadly my city doesn't have many parks to see.

Use 'many' with countable plural nouns like 'parks' rather than 'a lot of' in more formal speech; 'a lot of parks' is not ungrammatical but here 'many' is clearer. Also 'doesn't have a lot of parks to see' is slightly awkward; 'doesn't have many parks' is more natural. Suggestion: choose appropriate quantifiers for countable nouns.

× But I think I'm going to another another city to see parks.

✓ But I think I'm going to another city to see parks.

The word 'another' is duplicated accidentally. Also 'going to another city to see parks' is acceptable; ensure no double words. Suggestion: proofread to remove repeated words.

× Yes, I would love to visit a park that has a large green area where we can have a picnic for example.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit a park that has a large green area where we can have a picnic, for example.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; issue fixed by adding a comma before 'for example' for clarity. Marked as present participle type because 'have' is correct; minimal change. Suggestion: use punctuation to improve readability.

× I enjoy spending time outdoors with friends because it's relaxing and give us a change to play to play games and enjoy the fresh air.

✓ I enjoy spending time outdoors with friends because it's relaxing and gives us a chance to play games and enjoy the fresh air.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' (singular) requires 'gives' not 'give'. Also 'change' should be 'chance'. 'to play' was repeated twice; remove duplicate. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects, check commonly confused words, and remove duplicated words.