Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You did not provide an answer. Always respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep your response natural and under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they felt like magical places. For example, I used to spend hours on swings and explore small trails, which helped me make friends and stay active.

제안: Good direct answer and clear preference. Improve fluency by removing filler words, tightening phrasing, and using linking words to add a brief reason. Also fix minor grammar (e.g. 'runnings' -> 'running'). Keep it within three sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now I mainly go for running and fitness training. Because I’m 23, I prefer exercising on the paths rather than using the playground equipment, which feels more suitable for adults.

제안: You answered clearly but the supporting detail is vague and slightly awkward. Use linking words and give a specific reason or example of how more parks would help. Avoid unclear phrases like 'without repeat days like. Always.'

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because having more green spaces gives people more options for relaxation and activities. For instance, more parks would allow families to choose different picnic spots and prevent overcrowding on weekends.

제안: You gave a tentative answer but it is unclear and contains filler words and grammatical errors. Be specific about the park name or type, explain why it interests you, and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace 'England Spa' with the correct name if possible and say what appeals to you.

예시: I’m not sure exactly, but I would like to visit one of England’s spa gardens because of their extensive lawns and peaceful atmosphere. For example, a historic spa garden would be appealing since I enjoy quiet walks and well-maintained green spaces.

× Honestly yes, but nowadays and in this age that I'm 23 right now, I prefer to go to parks for runnings and for, uh, training, not umm, playing with the park equipments.

✓ Honestly, yes. Nowadays, at 23, I prefer going to parks for running and training, not for playing with the park equipment.

The original uses 'go to parks for runnings' which is incorrect: 'running' is an uncountable gerund (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'prefer to go to parks for running' can be more naturally 'prefer going to parks for running.' 'Park equipments' is incorrect because 'equipment' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized (Article errors/ Singular and plural issue, but corrected here with proper noun form). Suggestions: use the gerund 'running' (no -s) and 'equipment' (unchanged form). Use commas to improve clarity and remove redundant phrases such as 'that I'm 23 right now' -> 'at 23.'

× Of course yes, because when we have many choices we can have better moments and make good memories without repeat days like. Always.

✓ Of course, yes. When we have many choices, we can have better experiences and make good memories instead of repeating the same days.

The original contains awkward conjunction/connector use and an incomplete phrase 'without repeat days like. Always.' which creates a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type 16 and 26). 'Better moments' is awkward; 'experiences' is more natural. 'Repeat days' should be 'repeating the same days' using a gerund phrase. Suggestions: restructure the sentence into two clear clauses, use 'instead of' to show contrast, and replace awkward nouns with natural collocations.

× I'm not sure, but if I have to choose I think that one of the England Spa can be umm, interesting for me with their green place.

✓ I'm not sure, but if I had to choose, I think one of the English spas would be interesting to me because of its green space.

Multiple issues: tense/modal use 'if I have to choose' should be backshifted to 'if I had to choose' in this hypothetical context (Grammar Problem Type 7 and 6), and 'one of the England Spa' is incorrect use of articles and noun forms (Grammar Problem Type 17/22). 'England' should be the adjective 'English,' 'spa' should be plural 'spas' when saying 'one of the ... spas,' and 'their green place' is awkward possessive and collocation—use 'its green space.' Also 'can be interesting for me' is awkward; 'would be interesting to me' fits the hypothetical. Suggestions: use conditional grammar ('if I had to choose... would be'), correct adjective form, pluralization, and natural collocations ('green space').