Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), and add specific detail with clear linking. Fix tense consistency and small errors (e.g., 'love' → 'loved', 'park' → 'parks', 'during the weekends' → 'on weekends').

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I spent hours on the slides and swings with my friends, and my parents often took us for picnics on weekends. Because I had lots of energy, parks were the perfect place to run around and play games like tag.

제안: Improve grammar, pronunciation-related spelling errors, and sentence structure by splitting into shorter sentences and using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'breathe some fresh air', 'places are', 'relax my mind') and be more specific about frequency and activities.

예시: Yes, I do. Parks are great places to breathe fresh air, and I often go jogging there a few times a week. I also take leisurely walks to clear my mind, and sometimes I meet friends for a picnic or a chat.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct errors (e.g., 'In my case', 'rarely visit parks'). Provide a brief reasoned opinion with an example of other priorities and use linking words for coherence. Avoid vague phrases like 'upgrading' without specifics.

예시: To be honest, I don't think we need many more parks in my area because I rarely visit them. Instead, I would prefer the city to prioritise practical improvements, such as upgrading public transport and repairing sidewalks, which would benefit more residents.

제안: Make the response more natural and concise, correct capitalization and repetition, and add a brief reason or plan using linking words. Replace 'Big Lake' with 'a large lake' and avoid repeating 'I would'.

예시: Yes, I'd really like to visit Nature Park, which just opened near my house. I heard it has beautiful gardens and a large lake, so I plan to go next weekend to take photos and relax by the water.

× I love going to park.

✓ I love going to the park.

Missing definite article 'the' before a singular countable noun when referring to a specific type of place (parks in general as an activity). Use 'the park' to indicate the usual place one goes; alternatively 'parks' could be plural: 'I love going to parks.'

× As a child I remember spending hours on the slide and swinging with my friends, and my parents would often take me for a picnic during the weekends.

✓ As a child I remember spending hours on the slides and swinging with my friends, and my parents would often take me for a picnic during the weekends.

Plural 'slides' is more natural when referring to play equipment in parks; not strictly tense, but aligns with count noun usage. Also 'during the weekends' is acceptable but 'on weekends' is more natural. Suggestion: '...often took me for picnics on weekends.' for consistent past tense.

× I also think parks were the perfect place to burn off energy.

✓ I also think parks were the perfect places to burn off energy.

Mismatch between plural subject 'parks' and singular complement 'place.' Use plural 'places' to agree with 'parks.'

× Yes I do, there are great place to bread some fresh airs and I often go jogging or just take a walk to relax my mind and I think it is a nice place to spend quality time with friends.

✓ Yes I do. There are great places to breathe some fresh air, and I often go jogging or just take a walk to relax my mind, and I think it is a nice place to spend quality time with friends.

Multiple errors: 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'there are.' 'Bread' is a misspelling of 'breathe.' 'Airs' is incorrect; uncountable noun 'air' is used (no plural). Punctuation: run-on sentence needs separation into sentences or commas. Also 'relax my mind' is acceptable but 'clear my mind' is more idiomatic.

× I don't think we need more parks. In my safety I to be honest I rarely visit park so I think it would not make much difference to me.

✓ I don't think we need more parks. To be honest, for safety reasons I rarely visit the park, so I think it would not make much difference to me.

Multiple issues: 'In my safety I to be honest' is wordy and ungrammatical; reorder to 'To be honest, for safety reasons' or 'Honestly, for safety reasons.' 'visit park' needs the definite article 'the park' when referring to parks in general or a specific park. Also punctuation and word order fixed.

× I think the city should prioritise other improvements such as upgrading.

✓ I think the city should prioritise other improvements, such as upgrading infrastructure.

Sentence is vague: 'upgrading' requires an object (what to upgrade). Adding 'infrastructure' or another noun completes the verb and clarifies meaning. Also added a comma before 'such as.'

× I would really like to visit Nature Park. It is a park that just opened nearby my house.

✓ I would really like to visit Nature Park. It is a park that just opened near my house.

Use 'near' rather than 'nearby' before a noun; 'nearby my house' is ungrammatical. 'Nearby' is typically used as an adverb or adjective ('a nearby park').

× I have heard it has beautiful gardens and a Big Lake.

✓ I have heard it has beautiful gardens and a big lake.

'Big' should not be capitalised in mid-sentence. Use lowercase 'big' since it is a normal adjective, not a proper noun.

× I would go there.

✓ I would like to go there.

Context shows a desire to visit in the future; 'I would like to go there' is more natural and matches the preceding 'I would really like to visit.' 'I would go there' is grammatically correct but less natural in this context; revise for clarity and politeness.