Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically consistent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid listing places without clear relevance and correct tense (use past tense when talking about childhood). Use linking words like "for example" or "also" appropriately.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often visited the Summer Palace near my home in Beijing because I liked the lakes and gardens, and I also played in a smaller local park called Walrus Park with my friends.

제안: Answer more naturally and use correct grammar. Begin with a direct statement about the present, then give a clear reason with a linking phrase. Avoid awkward phrases like "that's happened" and ensure subject-verb agreement.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks nowadays. In particular, I like Shakespeare Regional Park near northeast Auckland because the scenery is peaceful and the coastal views are beautiful.

제안: Keep your answer relevant and coherent. Give a clear opinion about wanting more parks, then explain why with specific reasons (e.g., health, green space). Avoid irrelevant or confusing details (car model, unclear phrases). Use one or two linking words to connect reasons.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For instance, more neighborhood parks would make it easier for families to walk or cycle without traveling far.

제안: Be specific and accurate. State the parks you want to visit and explain why with concrete details. Use correct vocabulary and full sentences, and avoid invented or unclear terms (e.g., "Transco like"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Hoan Kiem Lake in Hanoi in the future because I have seen photos of its peaceful lake and historic bridge. As a child I was fascinated by travel books showing the area, and I think experiencing the atmosphere in person would be unforgettable.

× Yes, I love to go to Walrus Park while I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I loved going to Walrus Park when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'loved' and the gerund 'going' to match the past time frame and sound natural. Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in the past: 'I loved going to...'.

× For example, I love to go to the Summer Palace, which is not far from my home in Beijing.

✓ For example, I loved going to the Summer Palace, which was not far from my home in Beijing.

The context is about childhood, so verbs should be in the past. Change 'love to go' to 'loved going' and 'is not far' to 'was not far' to keep consistent past tense. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with 'when I was a kid'.

× And I love to go to the Sun Ethan Park and the Beijing CBD as well.

✓ And I loved going to Sun Ethan Park and the Beijing CBD as well.

Again, describing childhood habits requires past tense 'loved' and gerund 'going' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'loved going to...' for repeated past actions.

× Yes, that's happened.

✓ Yes, that has happened.

Word order is incorrect. The present perfect form should be 'that has happened', not 'that's happened' if intending full form. If meaning 'Yes, that happens', use present tense. Determine intended meaning and use 'that has happened' for completed events or 'that happens' for general statements. Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary placement: 'has' before past participle.

× Hasn't changed to a large extent as of now.

✓ It hasn't changed to a large extent as of now.

The sentence lacks a subject. Add 'It' to form a complete sentence. Also 'as of now' is acceptable but 'so far' could be more natural. Suggestion: Always include an explicit subject in English sentences.

× I'm the big fan of the Shakespeare Regional Park and the northeast of Auckland.

✓ I'm a big fan of Shakespeare Regional Park and the northeast of Auckland.

Use the indefinite article 'a' with 'big fan' and drop the definite article before proper names. 'the northeast of Auckland' can keep 'the' because it's a region, but the park name usually does not need 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'a big fan of X' for general preference.

× I love that because the scenery is so beautiful.

✓ I love it because the scenery is so beautiful.

Using 'that' is acceptable in speech but 'it' is more natural referring back to the park. This is a stylistic correction; grammar is acceptable but pronoun clarity is improved. Suggestion: Use 'it' to refer to a singular noun previously mentioned.

× Of course, that's for sure.

✓ Of course, for sure.

'That's for sure' is not ungrammatical, but in this context the contracted 'that's' is redundant with 'of course'. Use 'Of course' or 'That's for sure' — not both. Suggestion: Keep responses concise: 'Of course.'

× I'm the big fan of the Shakespeare Regional Park and the northeast of Auckland.

✓ I'm a big fan of Shakespeare Regional Park and the northeast of Auckland.

Repeated: incorrect article 'the' before 'big fan' and before a park name. Use 'a' with 'big fan' and omit 'the' before proper park name. Suggestion: Use 'a' for roles or preferences: 'a big fan of X'.

× Don't park the world remote.

✓ I don't know what that means.

The original sentence is unintelligible and lacks clear grammar; likely a misproduction. Provide a clear, context-appropriate response such as admitting confusion. Suggestion: If speaking uncertainly, say 'I don't know' or 'I don't remember the name of the place.'

× Of course, I'd love to go to the Huang Kim Lake Park and the Hanoi CBD, which is the capital of Vietnam.

✓ Of course, I'd love to go to Huang Kim Lake Park and Hanoi CBD; Hanoi is the capital of Vietnam.

Minor article use: proper names usually do not need 'the'. Clarify the appositive with correct clause order. The conditional 'I'd love to' is fine for future desires. Suggestion: Use commas or semicolons to separate the explanation and avoid unnecessary 'the'.

× When I was a kid, I was really impressed by the images of that park on travel book.

✓ When I was a kid, I was really impressed by the images of that park in travel books.

Use plural 'books' and preposition 'in' with printed materials: 'images in travel books'. Also change 'on' to 'in' and pluralize to match general reference. Suggestion: Use 'in travel books' for images contained within books.

× The atmosphere is good and the Transco like was just breathtaking.

✓ The atmosphere was good and the landscape was just breathtaking.

Sentence mixes tense and contains unintelligible phrase 'Transco like'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'When I was a kid' and replace unclear phrase with 'landscape' or 'scenery'. Suggestion: Use clear nouns and keep tense consistent: 'The atmosphere was good and the scenery was breathtaking.'

× Took my breath away.

✓ It took my breath away.

This is a sentence fragment missing the subject 'It'. Add 'It' to form a complete sentence and use past tense 'took'. Suggestion: Complete short spoken fragments in writing by adding subjects: 'It took my breath away.'