Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は主旨に合っているが、文法ミス（時制・助動詞・冠詞）、冗長な言い直し、語順や複数形の誤りがあるため、流暢さと正確さを改善する必要があります。具体的には：1) 過去習慣は“used to”や“would”で表現する。2) 冠詞（a/the）と名詞の複数形を正しく使う。3) 不要なフィラー（uh, just that day）を減らし、文を2〜3文に簡潔にまとめる。4) 時制の一致を守る（父は当時働いていなかった → "my dad didn't work then"）。

예시: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park with my father to play baseball and catch. We went there once a week because my dad didn't work on that day.

제안: 答えは内容を伝えているが、語順と語法の改善が必要です。特に頻度表現、前置詞（to the park）、複数語の重複（also also）を直すこと、文を2〜3文に整理して理由を明確に述べることを意識してください。また接続詞を使って論理をつなげるとより自然です。

예시: Yes, I do. I don't go very often, but I usually visit the park once a month to go on a date with my girlfriend. I also find it refreshing because of the fresh air.

제안: 意見は明確だが、表現がぎこちなく冗長です。自然な表現では“I'd like to have more parks”や“There aren't many places to relax”のように言います。否定構文や理由説明は1〜2文にまとめ、不要な繰り返しを避けてください。

예시: Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because it is surrounded by many buildings and there aren't many places where people can relax.

제안: アイディアは良いが文法と語彙選択を改善する必要があります。“more bigger”は誤り、国名の形容詞（American）や“national parks”の複数形を使う点、“late night nature”は不自然です。理由を簡潔に述べ、具体的な例を挙げると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes. In the future I would like to visit larger national parks, such as those in the United States, because they have vast natural areas and fresh air where I can really relax.

× I used to go to park with my father to play baseball and catch ball.

✓ I used to go to the park with my father to play baseball and catch the ball.

『park』と『ball』は可算名詞なので冠詞が必要です。『the park』『the ball』のように定冠詞を付けることで特定の公園や既に文脈で示されたボールを指します。 Suggestion: Always use articles with singular countable nouns; use 'the' when referring to a specific place or object.

× I often go went there, uh, once in a week, just that day.

✓ I often went there once a week, just on that day.

混在した現在と過去の形（go went）が誤りです。話は過去の習慣を述べているため過去形の 'went' を使い、頻度表現は 'once a week' が自然です。 Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits and correct adverbial phrases like 'once a week'.

× My dad it's doesn't didn't work.

✓ My dad didn't work then.

文には余分な語（it's, doesn't）が混じり、時制も不適切です。過去の話なので 'didn't work' を使い、'then' を加えると時を明確にします。 Suggestion: Remove redundant auxiliary verbs and keep a single correct past tense auxiliary.

× Yes I do uh, sometime I don't really go to the park often but like once in a month I go to park to date with my girlfriend and also also at the time I can refresh because there is fresh air. Work.

✓ Yes, I do. Sometimes I don't go to the park often, but once a month I go to the park to go on a date with my girlfriend and refresh because there is fresh air.

複数の問題があるが主に時制と副詞の使い方（sometime→sometimes, once in a month→once a month）、冠詞の欠如（go to park→go to the park）、不自然な単語分離（Work.）が誤りです。 Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for頻度、副詞句 'once a month', and include 'the' before 'park'. Combine fragments into one clear sentence.

× Yes, I want to do. I want to see another park in my city because my city is surrounded by a lot of buildings, so I don't now I don't have really much place to be relaxed, to relax.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to see more parks in my city because my city is surrounded by many buildings, so I don't really have many places to relax.

'I want to do' は不自然、'another park' は文脈的に複数を望む場合 'more parks' が適切、'don't now' は誤字、'much place' は可算名詞に対して不適切です。 Suggestion: Use 'do' for short answers, 'more parks' for additional parks, 'many places' for可算複数名詞, and 'to relax' only once.

× Yes, there is, uh, in the future I want to go to like more bigger park than Japan has like such as Americans one, the National Park, uh, because there's a lot of late night nature and fresh air so I can relax more.

✓ Yes. In the future I want to visit a bigger park than those in Japan, such as an American national park, because there is more nature and fresh air so I can relax more.

複数形と単数形の不一致（more bigger parkは二重比較、Americans oneは誤用）、冠詞の誤り、'late night nature' は不自然です。 Suggestion: Use 'bigger' (not 'more bigger'), match singular/plural consistently ('parks'/'those in Japan'), use 'an American national park', and say 'more nature and fresh air'.