Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Avoid filler words (UMM) and sentence fragments. Include one or two specific details and connect them with linking words. For example, say you liked going to the park, name one or two attractions, and explain briefly why.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child there was a park called Leash Park near my home, and it had pretty flower beds and a small pond. My parents often took me there because I loved feeding the ducks and playing on the swings.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'study work' → 'academic work', 'seldom a good parks' → 'few good parks'). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating ideas.

예시: Not really. I don't have much free time because of heavy university coursework and the need to search for a job next year, so visiting parks isn't a priority. Also, there are few good parks near my home, which makes it harder to go.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'mean' → 'means', 'purify the air' is fine but explain how parks help). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would. My hometown, Changsha, often has poor air quality, so more parks with trees and green spaces would help improve the air and provide pleasant places to relax. In addition, new parks could encourage people to exercise outdoors.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer (e.g., 'Not really' or 'No'), avoid long hesitations and sentence fragments. If possible, offer a short expectation or plan for the future (when you might visit parks) and use correct grammar and linking words. Keep it concise.

예시: Not really. At the moment I have little free time because of university and my job search, but I hope that once I finish my studies or get an internship with flexible hours I will visit parks more often to relax.

× Yes I did UMM because when I was a child there was a great park called Leash Park near my home.

✓ Yes, I did. Umm, when I was a child there was a great park called Leash Park near my home.

Sentence needs minor punctuation for clarity but the verb 'there was' is correctly used for existence in the past; no tense change required. Suggest adding commas and splitting into two sentences to reflect natural speech pauses and improve readability.

× They have a lot of beautiful things in that park and my parents really loved.

✓ It had a lot of beautiful features in that park, and my parents really loved taking me there.

Original mixes plural subject 'They' with 'park' and has incomplete clause 'my parents really loved.' Correct by using singular reference 'It' or rephrasing to 'It had' for past description (subject-verb agreement and clarity). Also replace 'things' with 'features' and add the next clause 'taking me there' to complete the idea.

× To take me there.

✓ They used to take me there.

Fragment 'To take me there.' lacks a main verb/subject; it is an incomplete infinitive phrase. Recast as full sentence with subject and verb 'They used to take me there' to express habitual past action.

× Well, I don't because I don't have much time right now as I have a lot of study works in my university and I also need to find a job in one year, so going to a park is definitely not my top priority.

✓ Well, I don't now because I don't have much time; I have a lot of coursework at my university and I also need to find a job within a year, so going to a park is definitely not my top priority.

Use of 'study works' is incorrect collocation; 'coursework' or 'studies' fits. 'I don't' needs 'now' for clarity. 'In one year' is better expressed as 'within a year'. Maintain present simple for current situation.

× Besides, there are seldom a good parks around my house.

✓ Besides, there are seldom any good parks around my house.

Incorrect existential construction and plural mismatch: 'there are seldom a good parks' mixes plural 'parks' with singular article 'a'. Use 'any' with plural 'parks' or 'there is seldom a good park' for singular. Here 'seldom any good parks' is natural.

× If the city mean my hometown Changsha, I would say yes because the weather and the air quality is not very good in my hometown.

✓ If the city means my hometown Changsha, I would say yes because the weather and the air quality are not very good in my hometown.

Subject-verb agreement: 'city' requires 'means' (third person singular). Also 'weather and the air quality' is a compound subject and takes plural verb 'are'. Ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× So I would like to see more parks with some plants like trees so it can purify the air.

✓ So I would like to see more parks with plants like trees so they can help purify the air.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'parks' or 'plants'; use 'they'. Also add 'help' for natural collocation 'help purify the air'. Using gerund '-ing' is fine but pronoun agreement must match.

× Uh, no they aren't.

✓ Uh, no, there aren't any.

Response 'no they aren't' incorrectly uses pronoun 'they' without clear antecedent and mismatches expected answer form. For parks existence, 'there aren't any' correctly answers the question 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?'.

× The reason is, as I said, I don't have much free time right now.

✓ The reason is, as I said, that I don't have much free time right now.

Add conjunction 'that' to introduce the content clause after 'The reason is' for clearer sentence structure. This makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× Uh, I have to go to. The university every day and I also need to find some internship and job in the future so I have some the leisure time for me to go to the park.

✓ Uh, I have to go to the university every day, and I also need to find an internship or a job in the future, so I will have little leisure time to go to the park.

Original contains an erroneous period 'go to. The university' and awkward phrasing 'find some internship and job' and 'some the leisure time for me'. Combine fragments, use articles correctly ('an internship'/'a job'), choose 'or' for alternatives, and express consequence with 'so I will have little leisure time' to match intended meaning and tense.