Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and add specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific examples linked with a linking word. Avoid unclear fragments and incorrect expressions (e.g. “St. foods”, “set up a mini”).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child, especially on weekends with my family. For example, we would stroll around the lake and buy snacks from a food stall, then have a small picnic on the grass.

제안: Use present simple for habits and complete sentences with specific details. Link ideas using words like "because" or "and". Avoid unfinished sentences and be specific about activities you do there.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I live in the city and use them for my daily walks to reach 10,000 steps. I also meet friends there to chat on benches or exercise together after our walks.

제안: Make your opinion clearer and correct grammar. Give one clear reason and support it with a specific effect. Avoid sentence fragments and awkward phrasing like “we. Source more oxygen.”

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they help sustain a green environment and improve air quality by producing more oxygen. For instance, additional trees would make the neighbourhood cooler and encourage people to exercise outdoors.

제안: Answer the question directly and stay on topic; briefly acknowledge parks then explain preference with a clear linking phrase. Use correct tense and concise phrasing. Provide a specific plan or reason.

예시: I enjoy parks, but in the future I would prefer to visit beaches instead because I love swimming and relaxing by the sea. For example, I dream of going to the Maldives for my honeymoon with my partner because of its clear water and peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes, I remember I like going to the park when I was younger, especially during weekends together with my family.

✓ Yes, I remember I liked going to the park when I was younger, especially on weekends with my family.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past time reference 'when I was younger.' Use past tense 'liked' for consistency. Also use the preposition 'on' with 'weekends' and avoid unnecessary words like 'together' when context is clear. Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame and use correct preposition: 'liked' and 'on weekends.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× We stroll around, we buy St. foods, eat together, set up a mini.

✓ We would stroll around, buy street food, eat together, and set up a picnic.

The original uses present tense and fragments that don't fit the past narrative; also 'St. foods' is unclear and likely 'street food', and 'set up a mini' is incomplete. Using 'would' or past simple ('strolled') makes the sequence consistent with past habit. Add missing items to complete the phrase and include conjunctions for parallel structure. Also replace abbreviation 'St.' with 'street' and clarify 'picnic.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, since I live in the city I would go to the parks to complete my daily walk routine to achieve 10,000 steps.

✓ Yes, since I live in the city I go to the parks to complete my daily walking routine and achieve 10,000 steps.

The use of 'would go' is inappropriate for a current habitual action; use present simple 'go' or present continuous as appropriate. Also 'daily walk routine' is better phrased as 'daily walking routine' and connect purpose with 'and' for clarity. Match tense to present habitual action. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It is where I meet my friends and after we finish our.

✓ It is where I meet my friends, and after we finish our walk we usually have a coffee together.

The original ends with an incomplete fragment 'after we finish our.' It lacks the noun (e.g., 'walk') and result. Complete the sentence by specifying the object and adding a typical follow-up action. Use commas and conjunctions to improve flow. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I would love to see more parks in the city to sustain the green environment and we. Source more oxygen.

✓ I would love to see more parks in the city to sustain the green environment and provide more oxygen.

The original is fragmented and contains 'we.' and 'Source' as partial words. Combine into a single coherent clause: parks help sustain the environment and provide oxygen. Use 'provide' rather than isolated 'source.' Ensure sentence is complete and verbs fit the subject. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I love parks, but I would rather visit beaches in the future.

✓ I love parks, but I would rather visit beaches in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'would rather' is appropriate for expressing preference about future plans. No correction needed. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I dreamed of going to the Maldives someday with my loved one and have our honeymoon there.

✓ I dream of going to the Maldives someday with my loved one and having our honeymoon there.

The original mixes past tense 'dreamed' with a future possibility introduced by 'someday.' Use present simple 'dream' for ongoing desire. Also, after 'and' when coordinating with 'going' use parallel gerund 'having' rather than base form 'have.' Maintain parallel structure: 'going' and 'having.' Grammar problem type ID:8