Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and reduce redundancy (e.g., "I'd love" vs "I loved").

예시: I loved going to parks as a child, especially in the afternoons because they were lively. For example, many street vendors sold snacks, so my family and I would buy food and sit under a tree to relax.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer time expressions. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain with a specific reason and a linking word. Avoid contradictory phrasing ("Yes I am" then negative).

예시: I still like going to parks, but I don't go very often at the moment because I have a heavy workload. When I have free time on weekends, I sometimes visit a nearby park to relax.

제안: Provide a fuller reply: state your opinion clearly and add a reason or example. Use linking words to expand one or two sentences rather than a short yes/no answer.

예시: Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places for families to exercise. For instance, a new park in my neighborhood would give children a safe place to play.

제안: Be specific about which parks or cities and why; avoid filler words (uh). Use correct prepositions ("looking forward to") and give one concrete reason or example to support your preference.

예시: Yes, I look forward to visiting parks abroad, especially Ueno Park in Tokyo and Victoria Park in Hong Kong, because they combine beautiful landscapes with cultural events. For example, Ueno hosts cherry blossoms in spring, which I would love to see.

× Yes, I'd love to go in the park, especially in the afternoon because there's a lot of people and aside from that there's are some vendors who sell foods, so it's nice to eat and relax there.

✓ Yes, I'd love to go to the park, especially in the afternoon, because there are a lot of people, and aside from that there are some vendors who sell food, so it's nice to eat and relax there.

Errors: 'go in the park' uses wrong preposition; use 'go to the park' (preposition error). 'there's a lot of people' has subject-verb agreement and contraction form—use 'there are a lot of people' (subject-verb agreement; matches plural 'people'). 'there's are some vendors' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'there are some vendors'. 'sell foods' is incorrect pluralization—use uncountable 'food'. Suggestions: use 'to' with 'go', use 'there are' for plural subjects, remove redundant words, and use 'food' as uncountable when referring to types or items collectively.

× Yes I am, but as of the moment I didn't go to the park often because I have a lot of stuff that need to finish at work.

✓ Yes I do, but at the moment I don't go to the park often because I have a lot of stuff that needs to be finished at work.

Errors: 'Yes I am' is inappropriate response to 'Do you still like...'—use 'Yes I do' (auxiliary for present simple). 'as of the moment' is awkward; use 'at the moment'. 'I didn't go to the park often' mixes past tense with present meaning; use present simple 'I don't go' for habitual action. 'a lot of stuff that need to finish' has subject-verb agreement and missing passive/infinitive form—'stuff' (singular collective) requires 'needs', and 'finished' needs 'to be finished' or 'that I need to finish'. Suggestions: match tense to habitual present, use correct auxiliary 'do', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate verb forms (active or passive) for clarity.

× Yes, I am looking forward for that, uh, maybe some other parks in international places like uh, Japan, China and Hong Kong because I think it's more fun to be there.

✓ Yes, I am looking forward to that, maybe visiting some parks in other countries like Japan, China and Hong Kong because I think it would be more fun to be there.

Errors: 'looking forward for' uses wrong preposition; correct phrase is 'looking forward to' (preposition idiom). Also 'some other parks in international places' is awkward—use 'parks in other countries'. Use gerund 'visiting' after 'looking forward to' (verb + -ing form requirement). 'because I think it's more fun to be there' is acceptable but 'would be more fun' matches the future/anticipated context. Suggestions: use 'looking forward to' + gerund, choose natural noun phrases like 'other countries', and use conditional modal 'would' for anticipated enjoyment.