Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Use past tense consistently (e.g., 'liked', 'spent') and correct verb forms (e.g., 'went' → 'going' or 'went with'). Avoid repetition and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I spent most of my free time there because it had a playground and open space to play football. Also, I usually went with my family, which made those visits feel fun and safe.

제안: Clarify meaning and avoid false words (e.g., 'bar' instead of 'park'). Use present simple for habitual actions and add a linking phrase to explain frequency. Reduce hesitations and provide a specific routine or reason.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often take my daughter there once a week because she loves the playground and I like the fresh air. It is a good opportunity for us to exercise and spend time together.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words. Provide one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct grammar: 'parks give the city a sense of relaxation and peace.'

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks provide residents with relaxation and a peaceful environment. Moreover, having more green spaces would encourage outdoor activities and improve air quality.

제안: Answer directly then expand with specific detail. Avoid hesitation and incorrect words ('bar' → 'park'). Use conditional or future references correctly ('when I travel, I like to visit parks in the places I go'). Provide one or two specific examples of what you look for in parks.

예시: Not a specific park at home, but when I travel I always visit local parks in the towns I visit. I enjoy seeing their layout and facilities, such as gardens, playgrounds, or walking paths, because they reflect the local culture and planning.

× As a child I like to spend my all time on the park.

✓ As a child I liked to spend all my time in the park.

The sentence describes a past habit, so the past tense 'liked' should be used instead of 'like' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also 'all my time' is the correct word order, and the preposition 'in' is appropriate for being inside a park (Grammar Problem Type 11). Use 'the park' if referring to a specific park, which fits the context (Grammar Problem Type 17).

× I prefer to went to park with my with my family.

✓ I preferred to go to the park with my family.

The speaker is talking about past preference, so 'preferred' (past) is required rather than present 'prefer' (Grammar Problem Type 5). After 'prefer' the base form 'to go' should be used, not 'went' (Grammar Problem Type 8/9). Include the article 'the' before 'park' and remove the duplicate phrase 'with my' (Grammar Problem Type 22 and 26).

× Yes, sometime I go to the bar with my kids.

✓ Yes, sometimes I go to the park with my kids.

Use the adverb 'sometimes' (plural form) instead of 'sometime' for frequency (Grammar Problem Type 20). The context is about parks, so 'park' fits rather than 'bar'; ensure the correct noun is used. 'Park' may need 'the' depending on context, but 'go to the park' is common (Grammar Problem Type 17).

× Uh, I have a daughter. She like, uh, she like the bark, uh, background, uh, you take care once a week.

✓ I have a daughter. She likes the park; she enjoys the environment and we go once a week.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'likes' for 'she' (third person singular) (Grammar Problem Type 2 and 27). 'Bark' is a wrong word choice; 'park' is correct (Grammar Problem Type 13). The phrase was unclear; a natural correction clarifies meaning and uses 'go once a week' to express frequency with correct verb form (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 20).

× Of course, I like to see a lot of parks in my city, uh, as I think the park, it's give the, the city sense of relaxation and sense of peaceful.

✓ Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city, because I think parks give the city a sense of relaxation and peacefulness.

To express desire for more parks in the future or as a preference, 'would like' is more appropriate than simple present 'like' (Grammar Problem Type 7 and 6). 'The park, it's give' is ungrammatical: use plural 'parks give' to match subject and present tense (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 6). Use 'a sense of relaxation' and 'peacefulness' (noun) instead of 'sense of peaceful' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 26).

× Umm, honestly, no. But when I, uh, travel, I like to visit the, the park on that country I go or that, uh, town I visit.

✓ Honestly, no. But when I travel, I like to visit the park in whatever country or town I visit.

Maintain present simple 'travel' for habitual or future plans and 'like to visit' is fine, but phrasing needs correction for natural English (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use 'in' with 'country' and 'town' (preposition correction) and 'whatever' clarifies any country or town (Grammar Problem Type 11). Remove duplicated words and fix word order (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× I like to see the design of that park. I like, uh, to, uh, to explore the facilities inside the bar.

✓ I like to see the design of that park. I also like to explore the facilities inside the park.

The second clause mistakenly uses 'bar' instead of 'park' (wrong noun choice, Grammar Problem Type 13) and 'inside the park' is the correct prepositional phrase (Grammar Problem Type 11). Remove filler words and duplicated 'to' for clarity and correct sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type 26).