Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "the parks" → "parks") and small hesitations like "Well."

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played games with neighborhood friends on the grass, and we would share cookies and lemonade afterwards, which made those afternoons memorable.

제안: Give a direct answer and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct unfinished or repetitive phrases and be specific about what you enjoy (e.g., walking by a lake, watching blossoms).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For instance, I like walking along lakesides and sitting under blossoming trees in spring, especially when I visit with friends or family.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use precise vocabulary ("covered parks" not "covered parking") and link reasons clearly. Provide one clear recommendation.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks, especially covered or indoor parks. Because our winters last seven to eight months with heavy rain and snow, covered parks would allow people to enjoy green spaces year-round.

제안: Begin with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and plan. Correct small errors ("anyone" → "any" when referring to parks) and avoid wordy phrases. Mention what attracts you to the park.

예시: I don't have any local park in mind, but I would like to visit Zion National Park in Utah. I’ve seen beautiful photos of the canyons and hiking trails, and I would prefer to go in summer with family or friends to hike and enjoy the scenery.

× I always enjoyed going to the parks as a child.

✓ I always enjoyed going to parks as a child.

The definite article 'the' before 'parks' is unnecessary when speaking about parks in general. Use the zero article for general plural nouns: 'going to parks'. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to parks generally.

× That was one of the most fun activities to do, especially when there was friends around to enjoy this time.

✓ That was one of the most fun activities to do, especially when there were friends around to enjoy the time.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' is plural, so use 'were' not 'was'. Also 'this time' is vague—'the time' or 'that time' is more natural. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and choose a clear article for 'time'.

× Well, I also enjoyed having some cookie or dessert during the event.

✓ Well, I also enjoyed having some cookies or dessert during the event.

Countable noun 'cookie' requires plural when used with 'some' or an article: use 'some cookies' or 'a cookie'. Suggestion: use 'some cookies' or 'a cookie' depending on meaning.

× I think I do.

✓ I think I do.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and matches the question, so no change is necessary. Included for completeness.

× It feels very relaxing to me when I go to parks, especially when I go with friends or family.

✓ It feels very relaxing to me when I go to parks, especially when I go with friends or family.

Sentence is correct; 'parks' as a general plural needs no article. No change needed.

× I especially like parks that have a water view or those where the trees, especially in the spring season and some are also.

✓ I especially like parks that have a water view or those where the trees are beautiful, especially in the spring.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Remove awkward phrase 'and some are also' and add verb for 'trees' ('trees are beautiful') and simplify 'spring season' to 'spring'. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a verb and remove redundant words.

× I would love to especially covered parks because winter season takes most of the year in my city.

✓ I would especially love covered parks because winter takes up most of the year in my city.

Word order and article usage: place adverb 'especially' before verb phrase, use 'covered parks' without extra 'to', and 'winter season' can be shortened to 'winter'. Also use 'takes up' for duration. Suggestion: keep natural word order and concise noun phrases.

× I would say probably 7 or 8 months of the year it's winter season where there is active raining and snowing.

✓ I would say probably seven or eight months of the year it's winter, when there is active rain and snow.

Use words for numbers in speech are acceptable but write out for clarity; 'it's winter' is preferred to 'it's winter season'; 'active raining and snowing' is incorrect—use 'active rain and snow' or 'heavy rain and snow'. Suggestion: use 'when there is rain and snow' and convert numerals to words if needed.

× We still enjoy summer time with the parks but I think it would be a good idea if they can create covered parking for the winter season.

✓ We still enjoy summertime in the parks, but I think it would be a good idea if they could create covered areas for the winter.

Use 'summertime' (one word) and 'in the parks' rather than 'with the parks'. 'Covered parking' refers to car parking; likely intended 'covered areas' or 'covered parks'. Also conditional: use 'could' for polite suggestion. Suggestion: use correct compound noun and match modal tense.

× I don't have anyone in particular.

✓ I don't have anywhere in particular.

The student likely meant 'anywhere' (a place) rather than 'anyone' (a person) when referring to parks to visit. Suggestion: use 'anywhere' for places.

× I have seen on social media something called the Zion Park in Utah in the United States.

✓ I have seen on social media something called Zion National Park in Utah in the United States.

Park name: remove article 'the' before proper name and use correct official name 'Zion National Park'. Also 'in Utah in the United States' is grammatical; no change needed there. Suggestion: use correct proper nouns and omit 'the' for many park names.

× The pictures and photos are very nice there and I would love to visit at some point if I'm able to, and I would prefer to go in the summer season with some family or friends.

✓ The pictures are very nice there, and I would love to visit at some point if I'm able to. I would prefer to go in the summer with family or friends.

Redundant 'pictures and photos' — use one noun. 'Visit at some point' is okay but better split into two sentences for clarity. 'Summer season' shortened to 'summer'. 'Some family or friends' is unnatural—use 'family or friends'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and simplify phrases.