Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: state a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler sounds (uh), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I felt free running and playing on the grass. For example, I used to play hide-and-seek with neighborhood friends every weekend, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Use present tense for current habits and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases; use a linking word to connect memory to current feeling and provide a concise reason with a specific example.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. For instance, sitting on a bench now brings back memories of playing there, so I visit parks to relax and reminisce.

제안: Be concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'every time, whenever').

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because it would be easier to visit them regularly. For example, having small parks near my home would allow me to go for a walk or relax after work.

제안: Make the response clearer and more accurate: name the park properly (e.g., cherry blossom parks), avoid fillers, and provide a brief reason with specific detail about what you want to experience. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit famous cherry blossom parks in Japan in the future because I want to see the sakura in full bloom. For example, walking under rows of blooming cherry trees during spring would be a beautiful and memorable experience.

× Yes, I like going to the park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The question asks about past habit 'as a child', so past tense should be used. Also use plural 'parks' to match the general activity. Suggest using 'liked' for past habit and 'parks' or 'the park' consistently: 'I liked going to the park as a child.'

× It is because I feel free while playing on the, uh, grass.

✓ It was because I felt free while playing on the grass.

Referring to childhood requires past tense ('was', 'felt'). Remove filler and extra comma. Use 'on the grass' or simply 'on grass'; 'the grass' is natural here.

× Yes, until now I still want to go to the park because it reminds me a during my childhood.

✓ Yes, even now I still want to go to the park because it reminds me of my childhood.

Use present tense 'want' is acceptable for current desire, but phrase 'until now' is awkward; 'even now' is better. The verb 'reminds' needs the preposition 'of' not 'a'. Remove extra article 'a'.

× It was fun and enjoy and I really enjoyed it.

✓ It was fun and I really enjoyed it.

Maintain past tense consistency. 'Enjoy' is incorrect form here; remove redundant 'enjoy' and keep 'really enjoyed' to express past enjoyment.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city so that I can easily go there every time, whenever I have time.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city so that I can easily go there whenever I have time.

Phrase 'every time, whenever I have time' is redundant. 'Whenever I have time' alone is sufficient and idiomatic. Modal 'would like' is correct.

× Yes, I would like to go to a park, the famous park in the other countries like Japan, because I hear there's a park there which is called Sakura, and I like Sakura very much.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to famous parks in other countries like Japan because I've heard of a park called Sakura and I like it very much.

Use plural 'parks' or restructure to avoid awkward 'a park, the famous park in the other countries'. 'In the other countries' is incorrect; use 'other countries'. Use present perfect 'I've heard' for reported information. Replace 'which is called Sakura' with 'called Sakura'. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to the park. Also avoid repeating 'park' unnecessarily.

× I wanted to experience the, uh, blossom there.

✓ I would like to experience the blossom there.

Context asks about future desire ('Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?') so use present conditional/modal 'would like' rather than past 'wanted'. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma.