Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and cohesion. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace vague phrasing like “especially” with precise time or reason and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often rode my bike and scooter there, and I would play games with my friends, so we always had a lot of fun.

제안: Correct tense and word choice, and make the reason clearer and more natural. Use linking words to explain frequency and effect. Avoid literal translations like “real life.”

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I sometimes go for a run there because exercising outdoors makes me feel energized and positive.

제안: Fix grammar (verb forms and articles) and provide a brief reason with linking words. Be concise and natural: say why you are satisfied and mention convenience.

예시: Not really. I think there are enough parks, because I prefer the one near my home and don’t need to search other areas.

제안: Use correct verb forms and be more specific about the parks you want to visit. Use linking words to list features and give a short reason why those features matter.

예시: Yes, I’d like to visit some family-friendly parks in the future. I’m looking for places with picnic tables, seating and pleasant views so my kids and I can relax and eat together.

× Yes I did. I used to go to the park especially.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to go to the park especially often.

The original is understandable but sounds incomplete because 'especially' needs a target or adverb to modify; adding 'often' clarifies frequency and keeps past habitual meaning (used to). Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural pacing.

× I enjoyed riding a bike and scooter.

✓ I enjoyed riding a bike and a scooter.

When listing two countable nouns, include an article before the second noun or use plural: 'a bike and a scooter' or 'bikes and scooters.' This corrects article omission and improves parallel structure.

× I had a lot of fun with my friends there.

✓ I had a lot of fun with my friends there.

Sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and matches the question about childhood; no change needed.

× Yes I do, I sometimes go to the park because I enjoyed go for a running.

✓ Yes, I do. I sometimes go to the park because I enjoy going for a run.

Mixed tenses and verb form errors: 'I enjoyed' (past) should be 'I enjoy' to match the present habit 'I sometimes go.' 'Go for a running' is incorrect: use the gerund 'going' followed by the noun 'a run' or 'running' without 'a' (e.g., 'going running'). Also separate clauses with a period for clarity and add commas accordingly.

× It makes me feel real life and positive.

✓ It makes me feel real and positive.

'Real life' is a noun phrase, not an adjective here. If the intent is to feel authentic or alive, 'real' or 'alive' is better. 'Real and positive' pairs adjectives correctly. If 'real life' was intended, restructure: 'It makes me feel like I'm in real life and feel positive.'

× Not really, I think it's enough for me, especially I like the park nearby my home so I don't need to searching different areas.

✓ Not really. I think there are enough parks for me, especially because I like the park near my home, so I don't need to search other areas.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and incorrect verb forms. Use 'there are' for existence/quantity, matching plural 'parks' (there be issue and plural). 'Nearby my home' should be 'near my home.' 'Don't need to searching' is incorrect: use the base verb 'search' after 'need to.' Also split into clearer clauses and use commas/periods correctly.

× Yes, there are some parks I'd like to visit in the future.

✓ Yes, there are some parks I'd like to visit in the future.

Sentence is correct: 'there are' correctly expresses existence of multiple parks; no change needed.

× I looking for some place where I can eat and enjoy with my kids somewhere maybe have a seat, tables and nice view.

✓ I'm looking for a place where I can eat and enjoy time with my kids, maybe somewhere with seats, tables, and a nice view.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous: use 'I'm looking.' 'Some place' is better as 'a place.' 'Enjoy with my kids' should be 'enjoy time with my kids.' 'Somewhere maybe have a seat' is ungrammatical; use 'maybe somewhere with seats, tables, and a nice view.' Use plural 'seats' and include articles for countable nouns.