Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法と語彙の自然さを改善しましょう。過去形の一致（live→lived）や単語選び（play doughは粘土遊びを指すので文脈に合わない）を直し、話の流れを明確にするための簡潔なトピック文と具体例を入れると良いです。さらに、接続詞（e.g. however, but, so）を適切に使って整合性を高めてください。

예시: I liked being outdoors as a child because I grew up in a rural area without formal parks. Instead, I often played in fields, by rivers, and in forests, which gave me plenty of space to explore. As a result, I developed a love of nature and outdoor games.

제안: 文法（like to going→like walking through / like going to）と語彙（gospel parkは不自然。正式名や“a park”を使う）を正しましょう。また、情報の順序を改善し、理由を短く付け加えると説得力が増します。接続語（for example, because, therefore）で文をつなげてください。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I live in Kyoto, and we have a large park where the emperor once stayed, which is free to enter. Because it is spacious and quiet, many local people visit the park to relax and unwind.

제안: 短い否定だけで終わらせずに、理由を明確に述べましょう。初めに簡潔なトピック文を置き、その後に具体例と比較を入れて一貫性を持たせてください。固有名詞は正確に、または一般名詞で示すと自然です。

예시: I don't think my city needs more parks because Kyoto already has several large parks, like the Botanical Garden, plus many small neighborhood green spaces. In Japan, urban centers generally have more parks than rural areas, so Kyoto's provision seems sufficient.

제안: 地名や公園名は自然な英語表現に直しましょう（e.g. Mountain Natural Park→Mount Aso or a natural park）。過去形の一致（I've been there for a few times→I've been there a few times）や冠詞（the good hiking trails→good hiking trails）も修正してください。理由や具体的な特徴を繋げる接続語を使うとより説得力があります。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a natural park in Kumamoto Prefecture, such as Mount Aso. I've been there a few times when I lived in Kyushu, and I remember its vast grasslands, volcanic scenery, and excellent hiking trails, which I hope to explore again.

× When I was a child, I live in a rural area so I had no parks.

✓ When I was a child, I lived in a rural area, so I had no parks.

The sentence describes a past situation, so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'live' to 'lived' to match 'When I was a child' and ensure subject-verb tense consistency. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or states that happened in the past (e.g., 'I lived').

× However, I usually play dough in fielders, rivers and forests.

✓ However, I usually played with clay in fields, rivers and forests.

The original has several problems: 'usually' with past context requires past tense 'played'; 'play dough' is unidiomatic—use 'played with clay' or 'played with playdough'; 'fielders' is incorrect plural of 'field' and should be 'fields'. Suggestion: Use 'played with' + object and correct nouns ('fields').

× I really enjoyed playing outside.

✓ I really enjoyed playing outside.

This sentence is already correct and uses past tense appropriately. No change needed. Suggestion: Maintain past tense to describe childhood experiences.

× Yes, I like to going through parks.

✓ Yes, I like going through parks.

After verbs of preference like 'like', use the gerund form ('going') or the infinitive without 'to' ('to go'), but not 'to going'. Suggestion: Use 'I like going' or 'I like to go'.

× I'm living in Kyoto City, so we have the gospel park where Japan's emperor once lived.

✓ I live in Kyoto City, so we have the Gospel Park where Japan's emperor once lived.

For permanent or long-term residence, simple present 'I live' is more appropriate than present continuous 'I'm living'. Also 'Gospel Park' appears to be a proper noun and should be capitalized. The rest of the clause correctly uses past tense 'once lived'. Suggestion: Use simple present for states or habitual facts.

× We can go there without fees.

✓ We can go there free of charge.

'Without fees' is understandable but unidiomatic; 'free of charge' or 'without a fee' is more natural. Suggestion: Use common expressions like 'free of charge' or 'without a fee'.

× So many Kyoto citizens go and stay there to relax.

✓ Many Kyoto citizens go there to relax and spend time.

The original 'go and stay there to relax' is awkward. Reordering and choosing natural collocations ('go there to relax' and 'spend time') improves clarity. Suggestion: Use natural verb collocations and simpler structure.

× No. In Kyoto City we have enough parks such as Gospel Park, the Botanical Garden and many small parks.

✓ No. In Kyoto City we have enough parks, such as Gospel Park, the Botanical Garden and many small parks.

Missing comma after 'parks' before 'such as' affects readability. 'No' as a standalone answer is acceptable but brief; content otherwise correct. Suggestion: Add comma for clarity: 'parks, such as...'.

× I think there are more parks in the central cities than in the countryside in Japan.

✓ I think there are more parks in the cities than in the countryside in Japan.

'Central cities' is unclear; likely intended 'cities' or 'urban areas'. Use 'cities' for contrast with 'countryside'. The tense and structure are otherwise correct. Suggestion: Use clear comparative nouns: 'cities' vs 'countryside'.

× Yes, I really want to go Mountain Natural Park in Kumamoto Prefecture.

✓ Yes, I really want to go to Mountain Natural Park in Kumamoto Prefecture.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Additionally, if the park's name is 'Mountain Natural Park', keep it as a proper noun; otherwise, include 'the' if the name is descriptive (e.g., 'the Mountain Natural Park'). Suggestion: Use 'go to' + place name; add 'the' if the park name is descriptive.

× I've been there for a few times since I lived in Kyushu.

✓ I have been there a few times since I lived in Kyushu.

Use 'been there a few times' rather than 'for a few times'. 'For' is used with durations (e.g., 'for a few years'), while 'a few times' is used directly. The present perfect ('have been') with 'since I lived' is acceptable if the speaker's living in Kyushu is a past reference; consider 'since I lived' or 'when I lived' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I have been there a few times' and consider 'when I lived in Kyushu' if referring to past visits during residence.

× It has vast grassland, volcanic landscape and the good hiking trails.

✓ It has vast grasslands, volcanic landscapes and good hiking trails.

Parallel nouns should be pluralized for general features: 'grasslands' and 'volcanic landscapes'. 'The good hiking trails' should be 'good hiking trails' without 'the' for a general statement. Maintain parallel structure in the list. Suggestion: Use plural forms and remove unnecessary definite article for general descriptions.