Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and redundancies, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because I often rode my bicycle along the paths, which helped me relax after a long day at school. In addition, exercising there kept me fit and helped me control my weight.

제안: Give a clear opening sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (prepositions, verb forms) and avoid repetition. Be specific about frequency and benefits in 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit a nearby national park in my neighborhood, and almost every evening after work I go for a short jog or walk there. This routine helps me clear my mind and recharge after a busy day.

제안: Answer directly, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct noun-verb agreement and more natural phrases (e.g. plenty of space, make the city more attractive). Keep sentences concise and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would provide plenty of space for people to do light exercise like walking and jogging. Moreover, parks with trees and flowers would make the city more attractive, especially in spring.

제안: Give a direct response and then specific details about the park and why you want to visit. Use correct tense and pronouns, avoid vague phrases, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Mention a concrete feature and activity.

예시: Yes. A new park in the nearby countryside opens this summer, and I really want to visit it because it is famous for its large lake. I would love to walk around the lake and enjoy the peaceful scenery.

× Yes, I liked went to the park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The sentence incorrectly combines the past tense verb 'liked' with another past form 'went'. After a verb like 'liked' that expresses preference, use the gerund (verb+ing) to indicate the action enjoyed. Change 'went' to 'going' to make the structure correct and natural. Suggestion: Use 'liked doing' + activity (e.g., 'I liked playing') rather than 'liked' + past tense verb.

× I usually riding bicycles around the around it because I found a really nice way to help me uh, recharge down the wind after a long days of uh school's work.

✓ I usually rode bicycles around it because I found it a really nice way to help me recharge in the wind after a long day of school work.

Many issues: 'usually riding' lacks an auxiliary or correct tense—since speaker is referring to childhood habits, use simple past 'rode'. 'Around the around it' is redundant; use 'around it'. 'Found a really nice way to help me uh, recharge down the wind' is awkward: say 'found it a really nice way to help me recharge in the wind'. 'After a long days of uh school's work' has number and article errors: 'a long day of school work'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (simple past for past habits), remove redundancy, and use correct prepositions ('in the wind') and singular forms where needed.

× Furthermore, it can help me it also let exercise can help me controls my weight.

✓ Furthermore, it also lets me exercise and helps me control my weight.

This sentence repeats subjects and uses incorrect verb forms. 'It can help me it also let exercise can help me controls my weight' mixes multiple clauses incorrectly. Use 'it also lets me exercise' (lets + base verb) and 'helps me control my weight' (help + base verb; or 'helps me to control'). Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'helps' matches singular 'it'. Suggestion: Use parallel structure for linked benefits (e.g., 'it also lets me exercise and helps me control my weight').

× I still like going to the parks.

✓ I still like going to parks.

Using the definite article 'the' before 'parks' implies specific parks previously mentioned; general habitual preference is better without 'the'. Also plural 'parks' without article is natural when speaking about parks in general. Suggestion: Use 'going to parks' or specify which parks if needed (e.g., 'the parks in my neighborhood').

× I often visit the national parks, which near where nearest, near my neighborhoods.

✓ I often visit the national park nearest my neighborhood.

The original has redundant and incorrect prepositional phrases: 'which near where nearest, near my neighborhoods' is ungrammatical. Use 'the national park nearest my neighborhood' or 'the national parks near my neighborhood'. Also 'neighborhoods' plural is inconsistent with 'nearest'. Suggestion: Keep prepositional phrases concise: 'the park nearest my neighborhood' or 'parks near my neighborhood'.

× And because it's really convenient so that every, uh, evening when I after, when my work is done, I usually choose to have a little jog and walk in the national parks.

✓ Because it's really convenient, every evening after my work is done, I usually go for a short jog and walk in the national park.

The sentence contains redundant conjunctions ('And because' and 'so that') and disfluent phrasing ('when I after'). Also 'choose to have a little jog and walk' is awkward; use 'go for a short jog and walk'. Maintain consistent singular/plural with earlier correction to 'national park'. Suggestion: Remove redundant connectors, order time phrases clearly ('every evening after my work is done'), and use natural verbs for activities ('go for a jog').

× And I found it's a really good ways to clear my mind and recharge on the wind after a lot of hard work.

✓ And I find it's a really good way to clear my mind and recharge in the wind after a lot of hard work.

Tense inconsistency: speaker earlier said 'I often... when my work is done' (present habitual), so use present 'I find' rather than past 'I found'. 'a really good ways' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a ... way' or 'really good ways'. 'recharge on the wind' uses wrong preposition; use 'recharge in the wind'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habits (present simple), ensure number agreement, and use correct prepositions.

× Yes, I'd like to see my cities with more parks because it's provide a really plenty of space for citizens to do some light exercise such as walking and jogging and furthermore it contains many trees and flowers so in the spring it can make the city's picturesque and the attractive.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see my city with more parks because they would provide plenty of space for residents to do light exercise such as walking and jogging; furthermore, parks contain many trees and flowers, so in spring they make the city picturesque and attractive.

Multiple errors: 'my cities' should be 'my city' (or 'my cities' with plural agreement); 'it's provide' is wrong form—use 'they would provide' or 'they provide' depending on nuance. 'a really plenty of space' should be 'plenty of space' (no 'a' or 'really' before 'plenty' in that position). Use 'residents' rather than 'citizens' for naturalness. 'it contains many trees and flowers' should be 'parks contain' (plural). 'make the city's picturesque and the attractive' is ungrammatical: use 'make the city picturesque and attractive'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and consistent plural/singular forms; break the sentence into clearer clauses and use commas or semicolons.

× Yes, there is a new park nearby, opens in the summers in the countryside and really want to go there because it's famous for its lake and they love to walk around the lake and enjoy the beautiful sceneries.

✓ Yes, there is a new park nearby that opens in the summer in the countryside, and I really want to go there because it's famous for its lake; people love to walk around the lake and enjoy the beautiful scenery.

Problems: 'opens in the summers' should be 'opens in the summer' (singular, idiomatic) or 'opens in summer'. Missing relative pronoun: use 'that opens'. 'and really want to go there' lacks subject 'I'. 'they love' is unclear—use 'people love' or 'many visitors love'. 'sceneries' is usually uncountable; use 'scenery'. Suggestion: Include necessary relative pronouns, explicit subjects, correct tense and number for seasonal expressions, and use uncountable nouns correctly ('scenery').