Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 表达不够自然且有语法/用词错误。回答没有直接、简洁的主题句，句子冗长且有口语填充词；需要修正语法（如时态、冠词、复数）并提高连贯性。建议用一句直接的主题句说明喜好，然后用1-2个简短具体细节支持，避免多余词语。

예시: Not really. I preferred staying at home and playing computer games with my friends when I was a child. We usually stayed indoors and rarely visited parks, so I didn’t develop a habit of going to them.

제안: 回答重复且有明显语法错误（如不定式/动词形式、重复词）。缺乏清晰的主题句与简洁支持句，应避免重复信息并用连贯衔接词简洁解释原因或情况。

예시: No, I still don't. As I mentioned, I haven't been fond of parks since childhood because I prefer indoor activities like gaming. For that reason I rarely visit them even now.

제안: 回答含糊且语法和表达混乱，逻辑不清。需要先直接回答（Yes/No），然后用清楚的理由支持（如城市发展、环境、休闲机会），使用连接词（for example, because）并举一两个具体例子。

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would improve the city's green spaces and make it more attractive for residents and tourists. For example, new parks can provide playgrounds for children and pleasant walking paths for adults.

제안: 回答较好但有语法与表达细节需改进（冠词、词序、句子流畅度）。可先用一句明确的主题句说明想去的公园，再用具体细节说明原因（位置、特色、预期体验），并用连接词保持连贯。

예시: Yes, definitely. I would like to visit the National Forest Park in Hunan province because it is famous for its diverse flowers and trees. I hope to walk along its trails, see seasonal blossoms, and take photographs of the scenery.

× Not really my wise child.

✓ Not really. When I was a child, I didn't like it.

原句“Not really my wise child.” 结构不完整且含义混乱，似乎把“my wise child”误用为自称或补充说明。应分为两句并补全主语和谓语，明确指代小时候是否喜欢去公园。建议把意思表达为“并不是。小时候我不喜欢（去公园）。”以保证句子完整和语义清晰。

× I prefer to play with my friend at home.

✓ I preferred to play with my friends at home.

原句中说的是“作为孩子”的习惯（过去），应使用复数friends来表示经常一起玩的多位朋友或用单数但要明确指特定朋友。根据上下文是过去习惯，应使用过去时“preferred”。建议：表达过去经常性活动用过去时并酌情使用friends。

× We just played computer games and we seldom go to the park.

✓ We used to play computer games, and we seldom went to the park.

句子混用了过去时和现在时。“just played”指过去，经常性行为应用“used to”或简单过去时；“seldom go”也应与过去时间一致改为“seldom went”。建议保持时态一致描述过去习惯。

× MMM no, as I mentioned since I was a child I don't like go to the park and even now I I don't like going to the park too.

✓ No. As I mentioned, since I was a child I haven't liked going to the park, and even now I still don't like going to the park.

原句中动词短语“don't like go”缺少动名词形式及时态不一致。用于表示从过去持续到现在的状态，常用现在完成时(haven't liked)或简单现在加时间状语结合。重复“I I”是笔误，应删除。“too”放在句尾可改为“still don't”。建议使用正确的动词形式“like going”和合适时态。

× Sure, of course, even though I'm not really into parks more than in my city, it has a good thing my city's growth.

✓ Sure, of course. Even though I'm not really into parks, having more parks in my city would be good for its development.

原句结构混乱，比较结构“more than in my city”不合逻辑，且“it has a good thing my city's growth”是直译式错误，语序和表达不通。应先表明自己并不太喜欢公园，但承认公园对城市发展有好处，用“be good for its development”更自然。建议拆分句子，使用固定搭配“be good for”。

× Plus it can attract multiple reason in my city.

✓ Plus it can attract many visitors/reasons for visitors to my city.

“attract multiple reason”搭配错误，应该是“attract many visitors”或“attract people/reasons to visit”。同时介词“in my city”用法不当，意为“吸引人们来我市”，应改为“to my city”或重构为“bring more people to my city”。建议使用正确名词及固定搭配，如“attract visitors”或“bring more tourists to the city”。

× MMM yes definitely. I really want to go a park named the National Forest Park which is located at Hunan province of China.

✓ Yes, definitely. I really want to go to a park called the National Forest Park, which is located in Hunan Province, China.

原句缺少介词“to”在“go a park”前，应为“go to a park”。“named the National Forest Park”可更自然地说“called the National Forest Park”。地名前介词应为“in Hunan Province”。注意大小写和逗号使用。建议练习动词短语“go to”及定语从句位置。

× There has many different flowers and trees you can see.

✓ There are many different flowers and trees to see.

原句使用“There has”不正确，表示存在应使用“There is/are”。因主语为复数“flowers and trees”，故用“There are”。另外“you can see”可简化为“不定式短语to see”。建议记住“There is/are”结构并与主语数保持一致。