Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement) and correct word choice. Make the response more concise with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas and provide a specific example or memory.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because my father often took us there on weekends. We would walk along the lake and have picnics, which helped me relax and appreciate nature.

제안: Avoid repetition and fix grammar (remove duplicate words, correct infinitive use). Provide a clear topic sentence followed by one specific reason and an example. Use a linking word (for example, because) to make the answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks because they help me unwind after a stressful day. For example, I often sit under a tree and read, which helps me feel calm and refreshed.

제안: Make the purpose clearer and correct phrasing (e.g., 'enable me to explore'). Give a concise topic sentence and one specific reason or benefit, using a linking word to connect the idea.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would give me more opportunities to explore different neighborhoods and enjoy well-designed outdoor spaces.

제안: Be specific and correct word forms (e.g., 'I would like to go to Spring Amusement Park'). Combine details into a coherent response with a linking word and one clear reason why you want to visit (activities, facilities). Avoid sentence fragments.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Spring Amusement Park because it has many swings and outdoor exercise areas. I want to try the outdoor gym equipment and enjoy the rides with friends.

× Yes, when I was a child, my daddy always take us to pack.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my daddy always took us to the park.

The verb 'take' should be in past tense to agree with the past time frame 'when I was a child' (past tense issue) and with third person singular subject 'my daddy' when using simple past we use 'took'. Also 'pack' is a misspelling of 'park'. Suggestion: use 'took' and correct spelling to 'park'.

× This always helps us to enjoy the scenery of peaceful environment and equally helps us to relax and feel so comfortable.

✓ This always helped us enjoy the scenery of the peaceful environment and also helped us relax and feel comfortable.

The sentence context is past; verbs should be in past tense ('helped'). 'To enjoy' can be simplified to the bare infinitive after 'helped'. 'Peaceful environment' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Equally' is awkward here; 'also' is more natural. 'So comfortable' is informal; 'comfortable' suffices. Suggestion: match verb tense to context and choose appropriate articles and adverbs.

× Yes, I love I love visiting the parks because it makes me to enjoy the peaceful scenery and unwind my my stressful days because it makes me more comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I love visiting parks because they help me enjoy the peaceful scenery and unwind after stressful days; they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

There is a repeated phrase 'I love'. Remove duplication. 'Visiting the parks' is better as 'visiting parks' or 'visiting the park' depending on meaning. 'It makes me to enjoy' is incorrect; 'help' or 'makes me enjoy' should be used. 'Parks' (plural) requires plural verbs or pronouns like 'they help'. 'Unwind my my stressful days' is ungrammatical; use 'unwind after stressful days'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use correct verb patterns ('help someone do something' or 'make someone do something'), and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I would like to visit other parks to enable me explore the city and equally see how the arrangement of the parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other parks to enable me to explore the city and also see how the parks are arranged.

After 'enable me' we need the infinitive marker 'to' ('enable me to explore'). 'Equally' is awkward; 'also' is more natural. 'See how the arrangement of the parks' is not grammatical; use a passive or active structure: 'see how the parks are arranged' or 'see the arrangement of the parks'. Suggestion: add 'to' after 'enable' and reorder the clause for clarity.

× Yes, there are other parks I would like to go in the future like spring amusement park.

✓ Yes, there are other parks I would like to go to in the future, like Spring Amusement Park.

The verb phrase requires the preposition 'to' after 'go' ('go to'). 'Spring Amusement Park' is a proper noun and should be capitalized; add a comma before 'like' for clarity. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'go' and capitalize proper names.

× It has a lot of swings and other exercise activities like gym.

✓ It has a lot of swings and other exercise facilities, like a gym.

'Exercise activities like gym' is awkward; 'exercise facilities' is more appropriate, and 'gym' as a noun requires an article ('a gym'). Suggestion: use 'facilities' and include articles where needed.

× So I would like to go there to gym and to see.

✓ So I would like to go there to use the gym and to look around.

'Go there to gym' is ungrammatical; after 'to' we need a verb (infinitive) or an article with a noun ('to the gym'). If the intent is to exercise, use 'use the gym' or 'go to the gym'. 'To see' is vague; 'to look around' or 'to see the park' is clearer. Suggestion: use proper infinitive phrases ('to use the gym', 'to look around') and include articles where necessary.