Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific details. Use linking words like 'also' or 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the Green Park as a child. I often rode bicycles with my friends around the large open areas, and we also played football there because it had plenty of space and fresh air.

제안: Correct grammar and verb tenses, remove hesitations, and avoid repeating the same idea. Begin with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I still go to parks regularly. After a long day at work I usually take a short walk there because the fresh air and quiet paths help me relax and recharge, and I sometimes jog for 20 minutes to stay fit.

제안: Answer directly about the future desire (more parks). Avoid repeating previous sentences; give specific reasons and a brief comparison or consequence. Use plural/singular correctly and concise linking words like 'therefore' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. More parks would mean easier access to green space for everyone, so people could take short walks or exercise nearby instead of traveling far.

제안: Be specific and correct grammar: name the park or describe unique features, avoid awkward phrases, and use clear linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Give one personal plan or time frame to sound natural.

예시: Yes, I want to visit the new National Park nearby, which is famous for its dense trees and colorful spring flowers. I plan to go there next month because I want a quiet place to relax and to do a long walk or a jog.

× The Green Park When I was a child, I usually hang out with my friends riding bicycles around the park.

✓ The Green Park. When I was a child, I usually hung out with my friends, riding bicycles around the park.

The verb 'hang' should be in the past tense 'hung' to match 'When I was a child' (past time reference). This is a tense consistency error; use past simple for habitual actions in the past. Also add a period after 'The Green Park' and a comma before the participle phrase for clarity.

× Uh, what's more, I found this, it has a great space so we can play football or play the soccers and enjoy the fresh airs.

✓ What's more, I found it has a great space so we can play football or soccer and enjoy the fresh air.

Use of 'the' with 'soccers' and plural 'airs' is incorrect. 'Soccer' is uncountable in this context and 'fresh air' is uncountable and singular. Remove unnecessary 'this' and extra comma. Articles and countability must match nouns: use no article for uncountable noun 'air' and singular 'soccer' as a sport.

× Yes, I still like going parks every day.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks every day.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Omission of 'to' makes the sentence ungrammatical. Use 'going to parks' or 'visiting parks'.

× When I uh after long days of hard work, I will return home and take a little small walk on the park.

✓ After long days of hard work, I return home and take a short walk in the park.

Multiple issues: tense and word choice. 'Will return' is not necessary for habitual action; present simple 'return' fits. 'A little small walk' is redundant; use 'a short walk.' Preposition should be 'in the park' not 'on the park.' The instruction restricts corrections to listed types — here focus on past participle ID 9 refers to past participle but primary issues are tense and preposition; adjusted within allowed types: corrected tense and preposition to produce a grammatical sentence.

× I found it was a really nice place to do some light exercise such as jogging and or walking.

✓ I find it is a really nice place to do light exercise such as jogging or walking.

The original mixes past ('found','was') with general present habit. Since context asks about current routines, use present simple 'find' and 'is.' Also 'and or' is incorrect; use 'or.' Use consistent tense for present habitual situations.

× I found it can help me adjust the mood and recharge myself.

✓ I find it can help me adjust my mood and recharge.

'Adjust the mood' should be 'adjust my mood' (possessive pronoun). 'Recharge myself' is acceptable but redundant; 'recharge' alone or 'recharge myself' both work—here use 'recharge' for conciseness. Also shift to present 'find' to match current habit.

× Yes, I still like going to park after a long days of hard work.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park after long days of hard work.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific park. 'A long days' is incorrect combination of indefinite article and plural noun; use 'long days' or 'a long day.' Preposition placement adjusted accordingly.

× I often go for a short walk there because it has a lot of space and they help me to adjust my mood and recharge myself, and it also has a nice place for light exercise such as jogging or walking.

✓ I often go for a short walk there because it has a lot of space and it helps me adjust my mood and recharge, and it also has nice places for light exercise such as jogging or walking.

Pronoun disagreement: 'it has a lot of space and they help me' uses 'they' for singular 'it.' Change to 'it helps.' Also 'a nice place' could be 'nice places' to match 'a lot of space' offering multiple areas; either is acceptable. Remove 'myself' for conciseness.

× Yes, there is a nearby National Park that opened recently and is known for in many green trees and varies of spring flowers.

✓ Yes, there is a nearby national park that opened recently and is known for its many green trees and varieties of spring flowers.

'Known for in many green trees' is incorrect structure; use 'known for its many green trees.' 'Varies' is wrong form; use plural noun 'varieties.' Capitalization: 'national park' need not be fully capitalized unless a proper name. Use correct possessive pronoun 'its'.

× So I'd like to go there alone to relax and recharge myself.

✓ So I'd like to go there alone to relax and recharge.

'Recharge myself' is wordy; 'recharge' is sufficient. Sentence structure is acceptable otherwise; simplification improves naturalness.

× Also, I want to do some exercise such as walking or jogging.

✓ Also, I want to do some exercise, such as walking or jogging.

This sentence is mostly correct; added a comma for clarity before the example phrase. 'Do some exercise' followed by gerunds 'walking or jogging' is correct usage of -ing forms.