Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and use a clear topic sentence. Use past tense consistently, reduce repetition, and add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. Whenever I had free time I often went with my parents to watch other children play and to feed the ducks by the pond. Those visits were relaxing and a highlight of my weekends.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and avoid repeated phrases. Use present simple/continuous appropriately and provide one clear reason with a linking word (because/so). Finish the thought—don’t leave sentences incomplete.

예시: I still like going to parks, but not as often as when I was a child because I am busy with work. Therefore, I usually visit parks only on rare weekends when I have free time to relax.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler or repeated words. Use linking words (because, so) and give a specific example of what a larger park would offer. Correct noun errors (park, not bark/bar).

예시: Yes, I would like to see more large parks in my city because current parks are quite small. A bigger park would allow space for long walks, family picnics and areas where people can exercise or take their dogs.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park, and explain briefly why you want to visit using a linking word (because/so). Correct place names and avoid repetition. Mention when or how you might go in the future.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Tennoji Park in Osaka, Japan because I have heard it has beautiful gardens and a zoo. Although it is far from my home now, I hope to travel there on my next holiday to spend a full day exploring the park.

× Yes I like going to park as a child whenever I have a free time I went to park and enjoying a children playing and usually I go with my parents and I enjoy a lot.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. Whenever I had free time, I went to the park and enjoyed watching children playing. Usually I went with my parents and I enjoyed it a lot.

Multiple tense errors: speaker is describing childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense (liked, had, went, enjoyed). Also plural and article errors corrected: 'parks' (general), 'the park' (specific place), 'watching children playing' is natural. Suggestion: keep all verbs consistent in past when talking about past habits and use articles for singular countable nouns.

× Yes, I like but not much like childhood because I am working now and I don't have enough time to go.

✓ Yes, I still like them, but not as much as in childhood because I am working now and I don't have enough time to go.

Incorrect comparison and article/phrase use: 'not much like childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'not as much as in childhood'. Also 'like them' or 'still like parks' clarifies reference. Suggestion: use comparative structure 'not as much as...' and maintain present tense to describe current state.

× So yes, I have to do my work and I don't have enough time to go. But yes, I like going and there is a.

✓ So yes, I have to work and I don't have enough time to go. But I still like going to parks.

Fragment 'there is a.' is incomplete and 'do my work' is wordy; 'have to work' is more natural. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and complete the idea; ensure verbs and objects are present ('going to parks').

× Yes, I, I like to see more parks in my city because there are many small parks, but they they don't have a big park big like we can walking there and we can walk with family and dogs that we, we have a small bark, but not that big. So I want a big bar.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many small parks, but they don't have a large park where we can walk with family and dogs. We have a small park, but it is not big enough. So I want a big park.

Multiple problems: article and word choice errors ('a big park' not 'big like'), verb form ('walk' not 'walking' after 'can'), pronoun repetition removed. Spelling errors 'bark/bar' corrected to 'park'. Suggestion: use modal 'would like' for preferences, 'where' to introduce purpose, and correct noun forms and spelling.

× Yes, I want to go to a Tennoji park in Osaka, Japan and my house is a little far from Tenozzi Park so I don't have time to wait there.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Tennoji Park in Osaka, Japan, but my house is a little far from Tennoji Park so I don't have time to go there now.

Do not use 'a' before a proper park name; proper nouns take no indefinite article. Spelling consistency 'Tennoji Park'. 'Don't have time to wait there' is odd—use 'go there now'. Suggestion: omit articles before proper names and use clear verbs for intention/timing.

× But yes in future I want to go there and enjoy my time.

✓ But yes, in the future I want to go there and enjoy my time.

Minor punctuation and article use: add 'the' before 'future' in this context ('in the future'). Tense 'want to go' is fine for future plans; suggestion: include 'the' and comma for clarity.