Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ понятный, но требует более естественной формулировки и исправления артиклей и предлогов. Избегайте чрезмерных общих фраз; добавьте одно конкретное воспоминание или причину, чтобы обосновать утверждение. Также сократите ответ до максимум 3–4 предложений и используйте связующее слово при добавлении деталей.

예시: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. I especially remember walking in a park near my home that was full of tall trees and bright flowers, where I used to play hide-and-seek with my friends.

제안: Ответ информативен, но содержит грамматические ошибки и некоторые неуклюжие выражения. Исправьте ошибки согласования (например, 'live music' и 'showcase' → 'showcase' согласовать). Используйте связку 'also' или 'moreover' для плавного перехода и сократите повторы ('I still like going to parks' и 'Every day I go...'). Постарайтесь дать одну-две конкретные детали о том, почему вы ходите туда.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I walk in Central Park almost every day because it’s perfect for exercise and many people practice yoga there; moreover, there are often live music performances that showcase local artists.

제안: Идея понятна, но формулировка неестественна и грамматически неверна. Не используйте неопределённые пафосные выражения ('I believe that our government will care about that'). Лучше выразить личное мнение и причину, используя условные или желательные конструкции. Уточните, почему нужно больше парков и где вы бы хотели их видеть.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places for families to relax. I hope the local government will add small green spaces in residential areas and near schools.

제안: Ответ смешивает настоящее и будущее, и содержит ошибки словообразования и порядка слов. Нужно чётко сказать о планах и привести конкретную причину или пример парка. Используйте связки ('because', 'for example') и корректную форму глаголов и существительных.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Tokyo in the future because I’ve seen photos of beautiful gardens there. For example, I’d love to walk through Shinjuku Gyoen and enjoy its diverse landscapes and quiet tea houses.

× When I was a child I enjoyed going for a walk, especially in a Central Park which is surrounded by tall trees and colorful flowers.

✓ When I was a child I enjoyed going for a walk, especially in Central Park which is surrounded by tall trees and colorful flowers.

The definite/indefinite article is incorrect before the proper name 'Central Park'. Use no article with most proper place names (or the definite article only if the official name includes it). Here 'Central Park' is a proper noun so the article 'a' should be removed. Suggestion: Use the proper place name without an article: 'Central Park'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Every day I go for a walk in the Central Park.

✓ Every day I go for a walk in Central Park.

Same issue: 'Central Park' is a proper name and usually does not take the article 'the' unless the official name includes it. Remove 'the' to use the correct form. Suggestion: Say 'in Central Park'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× This park is a great place for exercise and many people practice yoga there.

✓ This park is a great place for exercise and many people practice yoga there.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. However, consider parallel structure: 'a great place for exercising' or 'a great place to exercise' are alternative natural options. No correction required under the listed problem types. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× What's more, there are often life music performances that showcases the talent of local artists.

✓ What's more, there are often live music performances that showcase the talent of local artists.

Two issues: 'life' is a typographical word choice error; the correct adjective is 'live'. Also subject-verb agreement with 'performances' (plural) requires the verb 'showcase' not 'showcases'. Change 'life' to 'live' and 'showcases' to 'showcase'. Suggestion: Use 'live music performances that showcase...'. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Yes, I believe that our government will care about that and it will be many colorful parks in my native town.

✓ Yes, I believe that our government will care about that and there will be many colorful parks in my native town.

The clause 'it will be many colorful parks' is ungrammatical word order for existential construction. Use 'there will be' to state the existence of parks in the future. Also maintain parallel structure after 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'there will be many colorful parks'. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× Yes, I enjoy going for a walk in Japan, Tokyo, because I saw in the photos these parks and I really like it.

✓ Yes, I would enjoy going for a walk in Tokyo, Japan, because I saw photos of these parks and I really like them.

Multiple issues: word order and article use for place name ('Tokyo, Japan' is the natural order), tense/modal: the question asks about future desire so 'would enjoy' or 'want to' fits better than simple present 'enjoy'. 'saw in the photos these parks' has wrong word order and missing preposition: use 'saw photos of these parks'. Pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'parks' (plural) so use 'them'. Suggestion: 'I would enjoy going for a walk in Tokyo, Japan, because I saw photos of these parks and I really like them.' Grammar problem type ID: 6