Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わるが、文法ミスと不自然な表現が多いです。まず冒頭の“It’s a danger.”は文脈に合わないので削除または置き換えましょう。過去の習慣を表すには過去形（liked）を使い、理由や具体例を1つ加えて話を広げます。例えば「友達と遊んだ」「滑り台や草地で遊んだ」など具体的に述べ、接続語（because, so, and）でつなげます。文は最大5文に収め、語彙はchildhood, playground, swings, slideなどを使うと自然になります。

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my friends because we enjoyed playing on the swings and the slide. We also had picnics on the grass, so it was a happy time for us.

제안: 返答が不明瞭で文法的に誤りがあります。まず質問には現在の好みを簡潔に答え（Yes/No + short reason）し、その後に具体例を1つ加えます。意味が不明な表現（"hit on the ground"など）は避け、例えば『散歩する』『運動する』『ゆっくりする』など具体的な活動を述べましょう。接続詞（because, when）で文をつなげ、文法は単数・複数や時制に注意してください。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit them to take a walk or exercise because they are peaceful and have fresh air. Sometimes I go there to read or meet friends on weekends.

제안: 基本的なアイデアは良いが、文のつながりと文法を改善する必要があります。理由を明確に述べ（都市に緑地が少ないため）、条件文や結果を正しく表現しましょう（If there were more parks, the air quality would improve.）。冗長な部分を削り、具体例（children's play areas, walking paths）を1つ加えると効果的です。接続語（because, so, if）を正しく使い、時制と仮定法に注意してください。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks because my city has many buildings and not enough green spaces. If there were more parks, the air quality would improve and people would have nicer places to relax or exercise.

제안: 答えの意図は伝わるが固有名詞や表現が不明確です（"virus pops"は誤りと思われます）。行きたい公園の名前を正確に言い、具体的な理由（flower beds, relaxation area, attractions）を簡潔に述べましょう。接続詞（because, and）を使って理由をつなぎ、形容詞は名詞と正しく組み合わせてください（relaxing field → a relaxed lawn / a quiet lawn）。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a park called [Park Name] in the future because it has beautiful flower beds, large lawns for relaxing, and some interesting attractions. I think it would be a peaceful and enjoyable place to spend a day.

× It's a danger.

✓ It was dangerous.

The student used 'It's a danger' which is incorrect contextually and grammatically; the speaker refers to childhood experience (past) and should use an adjective to describe something (dangerous) not a noun phrase. Use past tense 'was' to match 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: use adjective forms to describe things and match tense (e.g. 'It was dangerous' or 'It was a risky place').

× When I was a child, I really like to go to parks with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked going to parks with my friends.

The subordinate clause refers to a past habitual action, so past tense 'liked' is required, and 'go to parks' is better expressed as the gerund 'going' for habitual activities. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and prefer gerund after 'liked'.

× There's only two like to go to.

✓ There are only two places I like to go to.

'There is' contracts to 'there's' but with plural 'two' it must be 'there are'. Also the sentence lacks a noun for what 'two' refers to; add 'places' and clarify subject. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb number agreement after 'there is/are' and include the noun being counted.

× Especially when I just hit on the ground and through the window.

✓ Especially when I was just running around on the grass or looking through the park's windows.

The original is incoherent and lacks clear meaning: 'hit on the ground' and 'through the window' do not fit the context. The student likely meant actions in parks (running on the ground, looking through windows). Suggestion: express actions clearly with correct verbs and prepositions and keep tense consistent (past).

× Yes, because in my city there are a lot of buildings and housing.

✓ Yes, because in my city there are a lot of buildings and housing.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but note tense: it describes a current situation using present simple, which matches the question. No change needed; keep present simple to describe facts.

× So this is the parks are increasing.

✓ So the number of parks should be increased.

The phrase 'this is the parks are increasing' is ungrammatical. If the intended meaning is a desire for more parks, rephrase to 'the number of parks should be increased' or 'there should be more parks'. Suggestion: use clear subject ('number of parks' or 'there should be') and correct verb constructions.

× If they are more parks that nature is increasing, the air will.

✓ If there are more parks and green spaces, the natural environment and air quality will improve.

Original sentence fragments and missing verbs: 'the air will' is incomplete. Use clear conditional structure: 'If there are more parks..., the air quality will improve.' Suggestion: complete the result clause with an appropriate verb (improve) and use noun 'air quality' for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to go virus pops in the future because there's some parts with beautiful flowers and others have the relaxed field or some attraction so they have own quality. Personality.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to [name of park] in the future because some parts have beautiful flowers, others have relaxing fields or attractions, and they each have their own character.

Multiple issues: 'go virus pops' is unintelligible and likely a mispronunciation; 'there's some parts' should be 'there are some parts' (there be issue) and 'the relaxed field' should be 'relaxing fields' (adjective form). Also 'so they have own quality. Personality.' should be 'they each have their own character.' Suggestions: use 'go to' + place name, match 'there are' with plural 'parts', use adjective '-ing' forms for describing (relaxing), and use possessive structure 'their own'.