Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and pronunciation, make sentences natural and concise, and give one specific supporting detail. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a short, linked detail. Avoid redundancy and correct verb forms and collocations (e.g., 'love going', 'swings and slides', 'play together').

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often went with my brothers and friends, and we played games on the swings and slides, which gave us a chance to be active and have fun together.

제안: Correct tense and collocation errors and make the response more fluent. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Be specific about how parks refresh you and where you sit. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid contractions that are incorrect (e.g., 'it'll' → 'it').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because it refreshes me after a busy day. For example, I often take a novel and sit on a bench by a pond, where the quiet atmosphere lets me read for an hour or two.

제안: Fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'living in the UK', 'parks', 'each one is different from the others'). Provide a concise topic sentence answering directly, then one specific reason with an example. Avoid repetition of 'unique'.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Living in the UK, I enjoy visiting different parks because each one has its own history and distinctive natural features, such as a botanical garden or a historic pond.

제안: Use correct modal verbs and clearer phrasing (e.g., 'I would like to visit the Tulip Garden in Hertfordshire'). Provide a concise reason and one specific detail about the park. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Tulip Garden in Hertfordshire in the future. I haven't had the chance yet, but I want to see the many different varieties of tulips and walk through the colorful displays.

× Yes, I love to going to the park.

✓ Yes, I love going to the park.

After verbs of preference like 'love', use the gerund (verb + -ing) or the infinitive without 'to' in some contexts. 'Love to going' wrongly mixes 'to' with gerund. Use 'love going' or 'love to go'.

× As a child I used to go there with my brothers and friends and we played games and ran around the swing and slides.

✓ As a child I used to go there with my brothers and friends; we played games and ran around the swings and slides.

Countable nouns in plural need plural forms: 'swing and slides' should be 'swings and slides'. Also adding punctuation improves clarity. 'Used to' with 'played' and 'ran' is correct past usage.

× I enjoyed it because it was a chance to be active and help one together.

✓ I enjoyed it because it was a chance to be active and help one another.

The phrase 'help one together' is ungrammatical. Use reciprocal pronouns 'one another' or 'each other' to express mutual action. 'Help one another' fits the intended meaning.

× Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because it'll refresh me and loves my spirits after a busy day.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because it refreshes me and lifts my spirits after a busy day.

Mixing 'it'll' (future) with present 'still enjoy' is inconsistent; present simple is better for habitual actions. 'Refresh' should be in present simple 'refreshes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Loves my spirits' is incorrect verb choice and subject agreement; use 'lifts my spirits'.

× I often take a novel with me since park are usually quit so I can sit on a bridge and read for an hour or two.

✓ I often take a novel with me since parks are usually quiet, so I can sit on a bench and read for an hour or two.

Use plural 'parks' for general statements. 'quit' is a misspelling of 'quiet'. 'Sit on a bridge' is odd for reading in a park; 'sit on a bench' is more natural. Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses.

× Yes, currently I'm leaving UK and in here we have so many parts each one is different from other so I love to go and visit every park because it have a unique history and unique nature of beauty that's why I like to go there.

✓ Yes, currently I'm living in the UK, and here we have so many parks; each one is different from the others. I love to visit every park because each has a unique history and unique natural beauty; that's why I like to go there.

'Leaving' was wrong for 'living'. Use 'living in the UK' and include the article 'the'. 'Parts' should be 'parks'. 'Different from other' needs 'the others'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it have' should be 'each has'. 'Nature of beauty' is unnatural; use 'natural beauty'. Break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences.

× Yes, I likely to go and tulips garden in Hertfordshire because for some reasons I couldn't able to go there and enjoy.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the tulip gardens in Hertfordshire because for some reasons I haven't been able to go there and enjoy them.

'Likely to go' is incorrect for expressing desire; use 'would like to go'. Use 'to the tulip gardens' for correct preposition and plural. 'Couldn't able to' is redundant; use 'haven't been able to'. Add 'them' to refer to the gardens.

× But if I get a chance in the future I will definitely go and enjoy because it have a different different varieties of tulips and.

✓ If I get a chance in the future, I will definitely go and enjoy it because it has many different varieties of tulips.

Remove leading 'But' to avoid a sentence fragment; add comma after conditional. 'It have' should be 'it has' for subject-verb agreement. 'Different different' is a duplication; use 'many different varieties' and finish the sentence properly instead of hanging 'and'.