Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar and word-choice errors (e.g., "every day" instead of "every single day" if used repeatedly; "it represents peace and possibility," not "their real life").

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially the sky. For example, I take a photo every morning because the changing colors and clouds represent peace and possibility, and they uplift my mood. This routine helps me notice small changes in nature.

제안: Answer directly and avoid contradictions: state your preference clearly, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Fix vocabulary ("both areas" vs "either area"; "rural areas" not "euro areas"). Use correct adjective forms ("beautiful" not "beautifully").

예시: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and natural. For instance, I enjoy photographing fields and forests since they offer varied textures and softer light compared with the rigid lines of old city buildings.

제안: Be specific and eliminate unclear words (e.g., "villainous" is incorrect). Give one clear reason with an example and use linking words (because, so, for example). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer photographing views abroad because I want to discover places I haven't seen before. For example, visiting another country lets me capture unfamiliar landscapes and cultural scenes, which inspires my creativity.

× Yes, I would like to take pictures of different views like I love to take pictures of a sky like every single day because it's fun every single day is a very beautiful day for me you know it represents the peace, the possibility and their real life. My everyday starts with it but.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. I love photographing the sky almost every day because it is fun; each day feels very beautiful to me. It represents peace, possibility, and real life. My day always starts with it.

Errors: incorrect tense/modal usage ('would like' vs simple present), run-on sentence, wrong pronoun 'their', informal phrasing. Suggestions: Use simple present for habits ('I like', 'I love photographing'), split into shorter sentences, use 'it' or 'real life' without possessive pronoun, and keep consistent subject-verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I prefer views and both areas, like I prefer both in my opinion.

✓ I prefer views in both urban and rural areas; I like both, in my opinion.

Errors: redundant 'and' with 'both', awkward word order. Suggestions: Place 'both' immediately before the items it refers to ('in both urban and rural areas'), and remove repetition. Grammar problem type ID:12

× But I would like to take a pictures of the euro areas.

✓ But I would like to take pictures of rural areas.

Errors: incorrect article 'a' with plural 'pictures', wrong term 'euro areas' likely intended 'rural areas'. Suggestions: Remove 'a' before plural noun and use correct noun 'rural areas'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Uh, it's like a peaceful and beautifully, which is a very natural, not like a old buildings.

✓ They are peaceful and beautiful; the scenery is very natural, not like old buildings.

Errors: 'beautifully' (adverb) used where adjective 'beautiful' required, incorrect article 'a' before 'old buildings', awkward clause. Suggestions: Use adjectives to describe nouns, ensure article agreement ('old buildings' without 'a'), and restructure sentence for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Well, I prefer views in another country, not in my country.

✓ Well, I prefer views in other countries rather than in my own country.

Errors: 'another country' vs plural 'other countries' mismatch with later 'more' and context. Suggestions: Use 'other countries' or 'another country' consistently; here plural fits the following ideas. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Uh, the villainous because I want to explore them.

✓ I prefer them because I want to explore new places.

Errors: 'the villainous' is incorrect word choice and sentence structure is awkward. Suggestions: Use clear subject ('I prefer them') and explain reason with correct nouns ('new places' or 'other countries'). Grammar problem type ID:26

× Umm, because I have seen where I live. I haven't explore that much of my country, but I would like to explore in another country more.

✓ I have seen the places where I live, and I haven't explored much of my country, so I would like to explore other countries more.

Errors: verb form 'haven't explore' should be past participle 'haven't explored', awkward clauses and preposition use 'explore in another country'. Suggestions: Use present perfect 'haven't explored', combine sentences for flow, and say 'explore other countries' or 'explore more of other countries'. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I wanna enjoy, I wanna see, I wanna explore every single thing.

✓ I want to enjoy, see, and explore everything.

Errors: informal 'wanna' instead of 'want to'; repeated 'I' and 'every single thing' is wordy. Suggestions: Use formal 'want to', combine verbs in a parallel structure, and use 'everything' for conciseness. Grammar problem type ID:8