Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity, and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and word choices (e.g., "relive" instead of "relieve", "where I've been" instead of "where I went to"). Keep responses to no more than 4–5 sentences and avoid hesitations or filler words.

예시: Yes, I do. I always carry a small digital camera when I travel because I like to capture special moments and scenes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street life, which helps me remember the atmosphere of different places. In the future, I enjoy looking back at these photos to recall my trips.

제안: Be direct and structured: state your preference clearly, then explain with specific contrasts. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., "lies", "files"). Use linking words (however, while, because) to make comparisons coherent. Limit to 3–4 sentences and correct word choices (e.g., "city scenes" and "peaceful mornings").

예시: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban areas attract me because of the vibrant lighting and busy street scenes in the evenings, which are great for colorful photos. However, rural areas appeal to me because of the peaceful mornings and natural landscapes. Therefore, I enjoy photographing both depending on my mood.

제안: Answer directly and correct vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I prefer photographing my home country"). Explain why with specific reasons and an example, using linking words (because, although). Avoid repetition and unclear comparisons. Keep it concise and use correct adjectives ("tropical" and "summery").

예시: I prefer photographing views in my home country because I know the places better and can capture unique local details. For instance, our tropical scenery and traditional markets offer colors and moments that tourists often miss. Although other countries have famous scenic spots, I enjoy showcasing the familiar but distinctive scenes from home.

× You enjoy taking photos?

✓ Do you enjoy taking photos?

The original sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'do' required for forming a yes/no question in the present simple. Use 'Do' + subject + base verb. Suggestion: Always include the appropriate auxiliary when forming questions (Do you + verb).

× Actually, I have a small digital camera, which is I always bring it whenever I go to some places and that way I can relieve moments and look back in the future of all the things that I've been to or where I went to.

✓ Actually, I have a small digital camera, which I always bring with me whenever I go to places; that way I can relive moments and look back in the future at all the things I have seen or places I have been to.

Multiple problems: incorrect relative clause and pronoun usage ('which is I always bring it' -> 'which I always bring with me'), wrong preposition 'to some places' -> 'to places', wrong verb choice 'relieve' should be 'relive', and redundant/awkward tense forms. Suggestions: Use 'which' to introduce a clause without repeating the subject, use 'bring with me' for carrying items, use 'relive' for recalling experiences, and use present perfect ('I have seen'/'I have been to') for past experiences relevant to the present. Grammar problem types matched: Incorrect use of pronouns (12), Incorrect use of prepositions (11), Verb in the past participle form (9) for 'been', Present tense issue (6) for tense consistency.

× that way I can relieve moments and look back in the future of all the things that I've been to or where I went to.

✓ that way I can relive moments and look back in the future at all the things I have seen or places I have been to.

Preposition 'of' is incorrect after 'look back' – the correct preposition is 'at'. 'Relieve' is the wrong verb; 'relive' means to experience again mentally. Also prefer 'have seen' or 'have been to' (present perfect) for past experiences relevant now. Suggestion: Use 'look back at' and choose appropriate verb forms for clarity.

× urban areas give me the different lies of the world such as the beautiful scenic lightings and sightings that evening.

✓ Urban areas give me different sides of the world, such as the beautiful scenic lighting and sights in the evening.

Problems: 'lies' is incorrect word choice; should be 'sides' meaning aspects. 'Lightings' is usually uncountable 'lighting' and 'sightings' is wrong for views—use 'sights'. Capitalization at sentence start adjusted. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns ('sides', 'lighting', 'sights') and avoid unnecessary articles like 'the' before 'different sides'.

× While on the other hand umm rural areas shall meet different files such as the slow mornings, the late back feeling.

✓ On the other hand, rural areas offer different experiences, such as slow mornings and a relaxed, laid-back feeling.

Multiple issues: 'While on the other hand' is redundant—use either 'while' or 'on the other hand'. 'Shall meet different files' is ungrammatical and wrong word choices ('files'). 'The late back feeling' is incorrect; likely 'laid-back feeling' was intended. Suggestion: Use a single contrasting conjunction and choose correct verbs ('offer') and nouns ('experiences', 'laid-back').

× Everything is very beautiful. So I think I choose both.

✓ Everything is very beautiful, so I think I would choose both.

'I choose both' is unnatural for a hypothetical preference; use conditional/modal 'would' to indicate preference. Also combine sentences for better flow. Suggestion: Use modal verbs (would) to express choices and preferences in hypothetical contexts.

× My country is a very tropical 1 so it gives me a tropical or summary feeling.

✓ My country is very tropical, so it gives me a tropical or summery feeling.

Errors: extraneous '1' removed; 'summary' is incorrect word choice—use 'summery' (meaning characteristic of summer). Also 'a very tropical' is awkward; 'very tropical' is preferred. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms ('summery') and avoid stray characters.

× But for me, if I were to choose, I definitely want to showcase more of my home country because I knew more of the places compared here is more of the scenic spots that people usually go to or visit.

✓ But for me, if I were to choose, I would definitely want to showcase more of my home country because I know more of the places here; the other places are mostly the scenic spots that people usually visit.

Problems: tense inconsistency 'knew' should be 'know' to match present relevance; awkward comparative phrasing 'compared here is more of the scenic spots' corrected to clearer contrast. Use 'would' for hypothetical choice. Suggestion: Maintain present tense when referring to current knowledge, use 'would' for hypothetical, and restructure the sentence for clarity.