Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is largely unintelligible and does not directly respond to the question. To improve, give a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using simple linking words (for example, “because” or “for example”). Keep sentences short and natural, and avoid irrelevant or garbled phrases. Aim for 2–4 coherent sentences and use vocabulary relevant to photography (e.g., landscape, colors, sunset, camera).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing colors and light. For example, last month I photographed a sunset at a local park and the colors were amazing. I usually focus on landscapes and natural scenes because they feel peaceful.

제안: The answer is unclear and doesn't state a clear preference. Start with a direct topic sentence saying which you prefer (urban or rural). Then give 1–2 specific reasons, using linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Use relevant vocabulary (city skyline, countryside, peaceful, crowded) and avoid hesitation and unrelated words. Keep it natural and concise (2–4 sentences).

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside is peaceful and has wide open spaces. For example, I like photographing rolling hills and fields where the light changes during the day. In contrast, urban scenes are often busy and noisy, which I find distracting.

제안: The response is confusing and does not answer the question. Answer directly whether you prefer views at home or abroad, then give a specific reason or example. Use linking words like “because” or “for instance,” and include concrete details (e.g., architecture, landscape differences, cultural aspects). Keep it natural, two to four sentences, and use relevant vocabulary (landscapes, culture, architecture, climate).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and architecture. For instance, I once visited a seaside town abroad where the buildings and colors were very different from home, which inspired me to take many photos. Travel helps me discover new styles and perspectives.

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✓ Last month I went to Altoona and took photos of the waterfront and colorful scenery; I also photographed a plant in a garden in London.

The original text contains multiple sentence structure errors (ID 26). Words are misplaced and many phrases are incoherent, causing unclear meaning. I reconstructed the sentence to match the speaker's likely intent: describing where they went and what they photographed, using past tense to match 'Last month'. Suggestion: keep one clear subject and verb per clause, use correct place names and simple past verbs like 'went' and 'took photos'.

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✓ I prefer human-made scenery. I like visiting plains and urban areas because of convenience and transport. Sometimes I feel nervous about crowded hostels and busy public spaces.

The original contains severe sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incoherent phrases. I interpreted 'human variety' as 'human-made scenery' and clarified likely meanings: preference, reasons, and feelings. Use simple present for general preferences ('I prefer'), and present tense for habitual feelings ('I feel'). Suggestion: express one idea per sentence and choose vocabulary that matches the intended meaning.

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✓ I prefer places in other countries because they offer different environments and resources. I haven't stayed in my hometown for two years since I moved to the capital for work.

This passage has multiple sentence structure errors (ID 26) and unclear phrases. I inferred the speaker prefers foreign countries for variety and has been away for two years due to moving for work. Use clear comparative phrasing ('I prefer places in other countries'), and correct present perfect negative ('I haven't stayed') to describe an action continuing to the present. Suggestion: state preference directly, explain reasons in a simple sentence, and use accurate tense for duration.