Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (plural/singular forms and articles), use a clear topic sentence and limit to maximum 3–4 short sentences. Add specific details and a linking word to make the answer coherent. For example, correct plural forms (“pictures”), use articles (“a picture”, “the pictures”), and replace awkward phrases with natural ones (“bring back memories”, “spending time”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to bring back memories of trips. For example, a seaside photo I took last year always reminds me of a fun day spent with my family.

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Correct word choice (e.g. 'mountains, rivers and natural landscapes') and avoid redundant phrases like 'scenario' and 'pictures scenario.'

예시: I prefer rural areas because I love mountains, rivers and natural landscapes. For example, I enjoy hiking in the hills and taking photos of the valleys, so I can share those memories with my family later.

제안: Start with a clear, concise topic sentence and use natural phrasing (e.g. 'I prefer landscapes in my own country'). Fix grammar (use 'mountainous areas' or 'mountainsides', 'especially in the north of the country') and add a linking word to connect ideas. Provide one specific example to make it vivid.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Thailand has many beautiful mountainous areas and rivers, especially in the north. For example, when my family visits Chiang Mai we always take group photos by the river to remember the trip.

× Absolutely, I like taking picture of various scenario to keep it as a memory.

✓ Absolutely, I like taking pictures of various scenes to keep them as memories.

The sentence has article and countable noun errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. 'various scenario' should be 'various scenes' (countable, plural). 'it as a memory' refers to multiple pictures so use plural 'them as memories'. Use consistent plurality and matching pronouns. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for multiple items and ensure pronouns agree in number.

× When I really look at that pictures I took from many years ago, it will help me think about the time when I enjoy with my family and friends.

✓ When I really look at the pictures I took many years ago, they help me remember the times I enjoyed with my family and friends.

Problems: 'that pictures' should be 'the pictures' (article and plural). 'I took from many years ago' is awkward; 'I took many years ago' is correct. Future 'it will help me think' conflicts with present habitual action; use present 'they help me remember'. 'the time when I enjoy with' is wrong tense and verb usage — use past 'the times I enjoyed with' or 'the times I spent with'. Suggestion: Match tense to context (looking at old photos is a present habitual action leading to past memories) and ensure articles/pronouns agree.

× If I have to choose one scenario, I will definitely choose rural areas.

✓ If I had to choose one option, I would definitely choose rural areas.

The conditional structure: 'If I have to choose' with 'I will' is a mismatch. For a hypothetical preference, use second conditional 'If I had to choose... I would choose'. Also 'scenario' is the wrong word; 'option' or 'type' is better. Suggestion: Use appropriate conditional forms for hypothetical situations and choose correct noun (option/type rather than scenario).

× This is because I like mountain, river and the natural geographic.

✓ This is because I like mountains, rivers, and natural landscapes.

Countable nouns 'mountain' and 'river' should be plural when speaking generally. 'the natural geographic' is ungrammatical; use 'natural landscapes' or 'geography'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general likes and choose the correct noun 'landscapes' or 'geography'.

× Whenever I have a chance to take those pictures scenario, I will chat with my family to help record our memory together.

✓ Whenever I have a chance to take those pictures, I chat with my family to record our memories together.

'take those pictures scenario' is incorrect word order and 'scenario' is wrong word. 'chat with my family to help record our memory together' is awkward; use 'chat with my family to record our memories together'. Also present simple 'chat' fits habitual action better than future 'will'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary words, use correct noun 'pictures', and use present simple for habitual actions; pluralize 'memories'.

× Of course, I prefer my country scenario.

✓ Of course, I prefer scenes in my own country.

'my country scenario' is incorrect collocation. Use 'scenes in my own country' or 'views in my country'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'scenes', 'views', or 'places in my country'.

× Here in Thailand you can see many mountainside along with the river, especially in the northern of the country.

✓ Here in Thailand you can see many mountainsides and rivers, especially in the north of the country.

'mountainside' should be plural 'mountainsides' or 'mountains', and 'along with the river' is better as 'and rivers'. 'the northern of the country' should be 'the north of the country' or simply 'in the north'. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms and standard prepositional phrases ('in the north').

× Whenever I go there with my family, we will take a picture together and chat this moment with our friends.

✓ Whenever I go there with my family, we take a picture together and share the moment with our friends.

For habitual actions use present simple 'we take' rather than 'we will take'. 'chat this moment with our friends' is unnatural; use 'share the moment with our friends'. Also 'a picture' could be 'a picture together' is fine but 'we take pictures together' might be better if plural. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and use natural verbs like 'share' instead of 'chat' for sharing experiences.