Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and accurate: correct pronunciation and grammar (e.g., 'take pictures' not 'tap picture'; avoid fillers like 'uh'). Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. For example, say why you take pictures and give a specific instance or purpose.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I take photos to preserve memories, for example, I photographed a sunset on a beach last year so I can look back and remember how peaceful it felt.

제안: Clarify meaning and accuracy: decide whether you mean urban or rural (your content describes rural). Use one clear topic sentence stating your preference, then 1–2 specific reasons with correct vocabulary (e.g., 'fresh air', 'green fields', 'peaceful'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy nature. For example, I like green fields and fresh air in the countryside, which makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.

제안: Be specific and correct: correct repetition and country names ('Korea'). Start with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Mention what you liked about the views (landscapes, architecture, culture). Keep sentences concise and avoid vague phrases like 'once before'.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially in Korea. I visited Korea once and enjoyed its beautiful landscapes and distinct architecture, such as temple sites and coastal scenery, which felt very different from my hometown.

× Yes, I like to tap picture for for different views that I noticed because I think this can uh, this can write down all the memory in my album and I can look back in the future.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views that I notice because I think this can record all the memories in my album and I can look back on them in the future.

Errors: 'to tap picture' uses incorrect verb and lacks -ing form after 'like' which commonly takes a gerund for general preferences (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue, Type 1). 'that I noticed' should be present simple 'that I notice' to indicate ongoing habit (present tense issue, Type 6). 'this can write down all the memory' uses incorrect verb 'write down' for recording images and singular 'memory' should be plural 'memories' (Types 9/1/13); better verb is 'record'. 'look back in the future' should be 'look back on them in the future' with correct preposition and pronoun reference (preposition/pronoun issues, Types 11 and 12). Suggestions: use 'like' + gerund for habitual likes, use plural nouns when referring to multiple items, use 'record' for capturing memories, maintain consistent present tense for habits, and use 'look back on them' for referring back to memories.

× I prefer you in urban area because because I like the beauty of the nature.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I like the beauty of nature.

Errors: 'I prefer you' is an incorrect pronoun 'you' likely intended as 'being' or omitted; this is a pronoun/use issue (Type 12). 'in urban area' needs plural or article: 'urban areas' or 'the urban area' (article/plural issue, Types 22 and 1). 'the nature' incorrectly uses definite article before an uncountable noun; correct is 'nature' (article error, Type 22). Suggestions: remove incorrect pronoun, use plural 'urban areas' for general preference, and use 'nature' without 'the'.

× The green flood plants and all fresh air in urban life is much more suitable for me and I think it's relaxed and peaceful.

✓ The green foliage and fresh air in rural life are much more suitable for me, and I think it's relaxing and peaceful.

Errors: 'green flood plants' is likely a wrong collocation/word choice 'flood' instead of 'foliage' or 'fields' (vocabulary/structure issue, Type 26). 'all fresh air in urban life' contradicts earlier 'urban' — context implies 'rural life' (sentence meaning/structure). Subject-verb agreement: plural subject requires 'are' not 'is' (Type 27). 'relaxed' is an adjective describing a person; to describe the atmosphere use 'relaxing' (adjective/adverb use, Type 13). Suggestions: choose correct nouns ('foliage' or 'fields'), ensure consistent meaning (rural vs urban), match verb number to subject, and use 'relaxing' for describing an environment.

× I prefer I prefer views in other country, especially in coral because I always see Korea once before and I think the view is very beautiful and I really enjoy the view.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially in Korea, because I have been to Korea once before and I think the scenery is very beautiful; I really enjoyed it.

Errors: Repetition 'I prefer I prefer' is redundancy (Type 26). 'other country' needs plural 'other countries' or 'another country' (singular/plural, Type 1). 'especially in coral' appears to be a typo; likely 'Korea' (word choice). 'I always see Korea once before' is incorrect tense and adverb use; use present perfect 'I have been to Korea once before' to indicate past experience with present relevance (past/present tense issue, Types 5 and 6). 'the view' repeated; better to use 'scenery' and adjust tense to 'enjoyed' if referring to that visit or 'enjoy' for general. Suggestions: remove repeated phrases, use correct pluralization, fix country name, use present perfect for past experiences with relevance, and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition.