Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Work on grammar (verb forms and article use), sentence length and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail linked with a connector. Avoid redundant phrases like “to be honest” and “for the future reference memories.”

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I have liked photography since childhood, and I used to take photos of landscapes and family outings to keep as memories. Because of that habit, I now pay attention to light and composition when I take a photo.

제안: Give a direct preference or explain balanced preference with clear reasons. Use linking words (however, because, and) and add a specific detail or comparison. Avoid repeating words and awkward phrasing.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different attractions. For example, urban areas have interesting architecture and lively streets, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and nature. Therefore I enjoy photographing both depending on my mood.

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy (tense and articles), make the reason more concise, and include one specific example or detail. Use linking words like because and for example to make the answer coherent.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has incredibly diverse scenery. For example, we have the Himalayas including Mount Everest, lush valleys, and rich cultural landscapes, so I find domestic views very special and worth photographing.

× Yeah, to be honest, I would like to taking pictures and different views because this habit is my from childhood.

✓ Yeah, to be honest, I would like to take pictures of different views because this has been my habit since childhood.

The verb pattern after 'would like' requires the base form (infinitive without to) or 'to' + base form; 'would like to taking' is incorrect. Also preposition and noun order: 'take pictures of different views' and 'this has been my habit since childhood' uses correct perfect present to show a lasting habit. Suggestion: use 'would like to take' and 'since childhood' for time expression.

× When I was a child, I could always prefer to click the picture with its capture for the future reference memories.

✓ When I was a child, I always preferred to take pictures to keep memories for future reference.

'Could always prefer' is ungrammatical: 'prefer' is a stative verb and should be in past tense 'preferred' when referring to childhood. 'Click the picture' is informal; use 'take pictures'. 'With its capture' is unclear and unnecessary; use 'to keep memories' and 'for future reference'. Suggestion: use simple past 'preferred' and clear noun phrases.

× I prefer both areas called urban areas or rural areas because both views have their own importance, that's why.

✓ I like both urban and rural areas because each has its own appeal.

The phrase 'prefer both areas called urban areas or rural areas' is repetitive and uses 'prefer' incorrectly with 'both' and 'or'. 'That's why' is a sentence fragment here. Simplify to 'I like both urban and rural areas because each has its own appeal.' Suggestion: avoid redundant phrasing and ensure clauses are connected logically.

× To be honest, I'll be from my own country because we all know that Nepal is an beautiful country among the different countries because Everest more diversity is also located here and the various kinds of natural beauties are located here.

✓ To be honest, I prefer my own country because Nepal is a beautiful country with Mount Everest and great natural diversity.

'I'll be from my own country' is incorrect for expressing preference; use present 'I prefer'. Article error 'an beautiful' should be 'a beautiful'. 'Everest more diversity is also located here' is ungrammatical; better: 'Mount Everest and great natural diversity'. Simplify and use present tense for general preference. Suggestion: use 'I prefer' and correct articles and word order.