Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting reason. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a brief example or consequence to enrich content. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'capture photos' or 'photograph' instead of 'snap') and use one linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I don't usually take many photos on vacation; I prefer to soak up the scenery and be present. For example, when I visited the coast last year I spent more time watching the sunset than photographing it, which made the experience more relaxing.

제안: The answer directly addresses the question and gives reasons, but it includes repetition and some grammatical errors. Improve by avoiding repeated phrases, correcting grammar, and using a linking word to connect reasons. Add a specific detail or short example to make the response more vivid.

예시: I prefer rural views because there are fewer buildings and more open green spaces. For instance, walking through a nearby village with fields and trees helps me unwind after a busy week.

제안: Your answer explains preference and gives a reason, but it's slightly long and contains hesitations and a counting error ('2 three'). Improve clarity by correcting numbers, tightening the sentence, and adding a brief specific example of a country and a particular view you liked. Use a linking phrase to present the contrast.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because, during visits to Thailand and New Zealand, I noticed much more open countryside and coastal scenery. For example, the wide beaches in New Zealand felt very different from the crowded coastal areas at home.

× Also there is lot of greenery and farmland and when I am there so I feel relaxed and happy.

✓ Also there is a lot of greenery and farmland, and when I am there I feel relaxed and happy.

The phrase 'there is lot of' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'lot' and needs correct punctuation. Use 'there is a lot of greenery' for count/noncount noun phrase. Remove the unnecessary 'so' after the conjunction; 'and when I am there I feel...' is the correct clause structure. Suggestion: include 'a' with 'lot' and separate clauses with a comma.

× To be honest, I prefer views of other countries because I have visited 2 three countries in last 10 years and what I find is that those countries have a lot of open spaces and greenery which I do not find here in my country.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views of other countries because I have visited two or three countries in the last ten years, and what I find is that those countries have a lot of open spaces and greenery, which I do not find here in my country.

Numerals should be written consistently ('two or three' rather than '2 three'). The phrase 'in last 10 years' needs the definite article 'the' and spelled-out numbers are clearer in speech transcripts. Commas improve clause separation. The tense 'have visited' (present perfect) is correct for experience, but wording and punctuation needed correction. Suggestion: use 'two or three' and 'in the last ten years', and add commas before conjunctions and relative clauses.