Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct expressions (e.g., “a bit photogenic” → better to say “I enjoy photography” or “I’m fond of taking photos”).

예시: I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me preserve memories for the future. Additionally, I often share picturesque shots on social media to connect with friends and document my travels.

제안: Provide a clear preference in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and unclear phrases ("taking busier"). Be consistent: if you prefer urban, give urban reasons; if rural, explain why with specific details.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I appreciate the vibrant street life and local culture. For example, cityscapes offer interesting architecture and bustling markets, which I enjoy photographing for their energy and variety.

제안: Give a direct answer and explain reasons with clearer phrasing and grammar. Use linking words like 'however' correctly, and be specific about what aspects you want to capture (e.g., architecture, festivals, street food).

예시: Although I love my own country, I prefer photographing views in other countries because I can capture different cultures and traditions. For instance, I enjoy photographing foreign street food and festivals to learn about local lifestyles and share those experiences with others.

× Yes, I'm little bit photogenic so I prefer to take a picture of different views so that so that I can preserve my memories for my future and also I'm little active on social media so that I can post on.

✓ Yes, I'm a little bit photogenic, so I prefer to take pictures of different views so that I can preserve my memories for the future, and I'm a little active on social media so that I can post them.

Issues: missing article before 'little bit' and 'active' ('a little bit', 'a little'), incorrect singular/plural 'a picture' should be 'pictures' to match general habit, repeated 'so that', unclear object for 'post' (should be 'post them'). Suggestions: add necessary articles ('a'), use plural for habitual actions, remove duplication, and include the pronoun 'them' to refer to pictures. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Honestly speaking, I really enjoy uh, taking views in urban area because I like their culture, the tourism and also about the place.

✓ Honestly speaking, I really enjoy taking views in urban areas because I like the culture, the tourism, and the places.

Issues: 'in urban area' should be 'in urban areas' (plural/general reference), incorrect use of 'their' for 'culture' (use 'the culture' or 'urban culture'), 'also about the place' is ungrammatical; better as 'the places' or 'the atmosphere'. Suggestions: use plural for general preferences, replace vague pronouns with definite article or specific noun, and rephrase awkward fragments. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I really enjoyed taking busier because of natural surrounding and it gives me peace, that's why.

✓ I really enjoy taking photos of busier places because of the natural surroundings; it gives me peace.

Issues: 'enjoyed' (past) conflicts with general preference context (should be present 'enjoy'), 'taking busier' is ungrammatical—likely meant 'taking photos in busier places' or 'of busier places', 'natural surrounding' needs plural 'surroundings', and sentence punctuation/structure is awkward. Suggestions: use present tense for habitual preferences, supply the missing noun ('photos' or 'places'), pluralize 'surroundings', and join clauses clearly. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

✓ Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly contrasts singular 'your own country' with plural 'other countries'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I like my country very much, however, I prefer to take views in other country because I want to explore their culture, tradition and food so that I can known for all the people I really want to visit.

✓ I like my country very much; however, I prefer to take pictures in other countries because I want to explore their culture, traditions, and food so that I can be known to the people I really want to visit.

Issues: 'take views in other country' should be 'take pictures in other countries' (plural and correct verb-object), 'their' is acceptable for countries but 'tradition' should be plural 'traditions', 'so that I can known' is incorrect—need 'be known', and 'for all the people I really want to visit' is awkward; better 'to the people I want to visit'. Suggestions: use plural nouns where generalizing, add the verb 'be' for passive construction, and adjust preposition from 'for' to 'to' when expressing 'known to someone'. Grammar problem type ID:12