Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は簡潔で内容は伝わりますが、発音の不明瞭さ（うなり声やためらい語）と文法の不完全さが目立ちます。トピック文を明確にし、理由を論理的に続ける練習をしてください。具体的には、ためらい語（uh, umm）を減らし、完全文（主語＋動詞＋目的語）で答えることを意識しましょう。また“make my memories”は不自然なので“help me remember”など自然な表現に置き換えてください。例文を声に出して練習し、2文〜3文で終える癖をつけると良いです。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to capture the atmosphere of the place.

제안: 答えの主旨は分かりますが、語彙や文法の誤り（"abuse"や数字の混入、時制・冠詞の欠如）が目立ちます。まずキーワード（rural areas）を明確に紹介し、その後に理由を1～2文で述べる構成を守ってください。接続詞（because, so, therefore）を正しく使い、形容詞やフレーズ（"more green and nature" → "more greenery and natural scenery"）を自然な英語に直しましょう。発音と流暢さの向上のため、短い模範解答を繰り返し練習してください。

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they have more greenery and natural scenery, which helps me relax. For example, I enjoy photographing fields and forests rather than busy streets.

제안: 考えは伝わるものの、文の構成が乱れており、文法ミスや不自然な表現が多く含まれます（"abuse"、不完全文、語順の乱れ）。まずは短く明確なトピック文を作り、その後に理由と具体例を続ける練習をしてください。例えば"I prefer views abroad"という表現を使い、"because I find them more interesting or different"という風に理由を述べます。また、不要な単語の繰り返しを避け、主語と動詞を明確にすることを意識してください。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they feel different and more exciting than what I see at home. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy photographing unique architecture and landscapes that I don't have in my country.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views on uh. I like umm because taking pictures uh can make my memories.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. I like it because taking pictures can help me remember moments.

The sentence has awkward structure and unnecessary filler words. 'Taking pictures' is correct (verb + -ing form) but the phrase 'can make my memories' is incorrect; we use 'help me remember' or 'preserve my memories'. Also remove fillers like 'uh' and 'umm' for grammatical correction. Improve by reordering: 'I like it because taking pictures can help me remember moments.'

× I prefer abuse in rural areas and because rural areas have more green and nature so I can feel relax. 10 urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have more greenery and nature, so I can feel relaxed than in urban areas.

Several issues: 'abuse' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'views'. 'More green and nature' is ungrammatical—use 'more greenery and natural scenery' or 'more nature'. 'Feel relax' is wrong form; use adjective 'relaxed'. The sentence also mentions '10 urban areas' which seems erroneous; likely intended 'than urban areas'. Fix comparative structure to compare rural and urban areas: 'prefer views in rural areas ... so I can feel more relaxed than in urban areas.'

× I prefer abuse in other countries than my country because. Are always I see my country view so I when I go trip in other countries I can I enjoy.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country because I always see the views in my country, so when I travel to other countries I can enjoy different scenery.

Multiple preposition and structure errors: 'prefer X in other countries than my country' should be 'prefer X in other countries to those in my own country' using correct comparative preposition 'to' and a clear noun reference. 'Are always I see' is ungrammatical; use 'I always see'. 'When I go trip' should be 'when I travel' or 'when I go on a trip'. Remove extra 'I' before 'enjoy'. The corrected sentence uses correct prepositions and word order: 'prefer views in other countries to those in my own country ... when I travel ... I can enjoy different scenery.'