Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は話の焦点がずれており、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。まず質問には「景色を撮るのが好きか」と直接答えるトピック文を使い、続けて具体的な理由や状況を短く付け加えてください。接続詞（because, so, when）を正しく使い、動詞の時制・形（take pictures, leave → carry/keep）や語順に注意しましょう。語彙は簡潔で適切な単語を選び、冗長な表現は避けて一文は最大3–4節に収めることを意識してください。発音と流暢さの改善のため、短い文をはっきり区切って練習してください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often take photos on my phone when I travel or feel tired because looking at beautiful photos helps me relax. For example, I keep a few calming landscape photos on my phone to look at when I need a short break.

제안: 回答は主旨は伝わるものの、語彙の誤用（oral, abuse, rule of you）や文法の誤りが目立ちます。まず「田舎の景色が好き」という明確なトピック文を作り、理由を一つか二つ具体的に述べてください。語彙は“countryside”や“rural area”を正しく使い、誤った単語は避けましょう。接続詞（because, so）で理由をつなぎ、例や感情（relaxed, peaceful）を加えると説得力が増します。短い、正確な文を練習して発音を整えてください。

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in the countryside and find them peaceful. For instance, quiet fields and small villages make me feel relaxed and remind me of home.

제안: 全体的にまとまった答えになっており、主旨は明確です。ただし不適切な語句（例：Syriaは桜とは無関係）や語順・文法の誤りがあります。最初に直接答え、その後理由と具体例（桜、田園風景、都市の景観）を短く述べてください。比較表現や接続詞（for example, because, although）を用いて論理的につなげるとよいです。また単語の選択（Sakura → cherry blossoms, countryside → rural areas, city side → cityscapes）を正し、冗長な繰り返しを避けて文を2–3文に収めましょう。

예시: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because it offers a wide variety of scenery. For example, you can see beautiful cherry blossoms in spring, peaceful rural landscapes in the countryside, and striking cityscapes in places like Tokyo.

× I really like to take picture of you.

✓ I really like taking pictures of you.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by a gerund when expressing general preferences: 'like taking'. Also 'picture' should be plural when speaking generally ('pictures'), and 'of you' is acceptable but 'you' may be contextually odd — keep if referring to that person. Suggestion: Use 'like' + gerund for habitual actions and pluralize countable nouns when general.

× Umm, I think I should left my favorite Bluetooth phone because if I'm so tired I can see the photos and I can relax.

✓ Umm, I think I should leave my favorite Bluetooth phone because if I'm really tired I can look at the photos and relax.

The modal 'should' is followed by the base form 'leave', not the past form 'left'. 'If I'm so tired' is unnatural; use 'if I'm really tired'. 'See the photos' is better expressed as 'look at the photos' in this context. Suggestions: After modals (should, can, must) use base verb; choose natural adverbs ('really') and appropriate verb phrases ('look at').

× I prefer countryside area view because I'm from countryside and I always watching oral rural abuse so it's so normal and I can relax if I see the rule of you.

✓ I prefer views of the countryside because I'm from the countryside and I'm used to rural scenes, so it's normal and I can relax when I see them.

Many preposition and article errors: use 'views of the countryside' or 'countryside views'. 'From countryside' requires the article 'the countryside'. 'I always watching' needs auxiliary and gerund: 'I'm always watching' or better 'I'm used to'. 'Oral rural abuse' and 'the rule of you' are unintelligible and likely wrong words; replace with 'rural scenes' and 'when I see them'. Suggestions: Use 'the' with nouns like 'countryside', ensure verbs have correct auxiliaries, and choose proper nouns/phrases for intended meaning.

× I prefer my own country's view.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country.

'My own country's view' is awkward; use 'the views in my own country' or 'views of my own country'. Include the definite article with 'views' and place 'my own country' after the noun for natural word order. Suggestions: Use 'views in/of' + country and include articles as needed.

× My own country is Japan and I think Japan has so many beautiful views like Syria, Sakura and in Japan we can take like countryside and City side our pictures a lot.

✓ My country is Japan, and I think it has many beautiful sights, such as cherry blossoms (sakura). In Japan, we can take many photos of the countryside and the city.

Sentence contains mixed ideas and wrong comparisons: 'like Syria' is incorrect as an example of views; probably meant 'sakura' (cherry blossoms). 'City side our pictures' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'take many photos of the countryside and the city'. Use commas and conjunctions to connect clauses. Suggestions: Use clear examples, correct nouns ('sights', 'cherry blossoms'), proper word order, and split long sentences for clarity.

× It's really small country but there are so many beautiful views that's why.

✓ It's a really small country but there are so many beautiful views; that's why.

Missing article 'a' before 'really small country'. Also add a punctuation break before 'that's why' and ensure number agreement: 'there are so many beautiful views' is fine. Suggestions: Use articles with singular countable nouns and connect clauses with appropriate punctuation.