Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and clear, with a direct topic sentence and a reason. To improve, make the structure slightly more concise and add a brief specific example to support your point. Use a linking phrase to connect the two ideas more smoothly (e.g., “so” or “therefore”), and avoid small grammatical slips (e.g., “they never really capture how beautiful the place is”).

예시: Yes, I do, but I usually only take a few photos because they never really capture how beautiful the place is. For example, when I visited the coast last summer I snapped a couple of pictures, then put my phone away so I could fully enjoy the sea breeze and sunset. Therefore, I prefer soaking up the atmosphere rather than photographing everything.

제안: Good direct answer and contrast. Improve by correcting unclear vocabulary (“BG streets” is unclear) and adding a concrete detail or brief comparison to illustrate why rural views feel more peaceful. Use a linking word like “however” to make the contrast clearer.

예시: In general, I prefer rural areas because they feel more comfortable and peaceful — for instance, I enjoy quiet walking paths and open fields that help me relax. However, when I travel I also like city skylines and bustling streets for their energy and architecture.

제안: Clear preference and reason. To improve, correct small grammar issues (e.g., “in other countries” and “different from what I’m used to”) and add a short specific example of a foreign view that impressed you to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word like “because” to strengthen the reason.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because the landscapes and city scenes are often very different from what I’m used to. For example, I was amazed by the terraced rice fields in Bali — discovering that landscape for the first time made the view especially exciting.

× Probably in other country I enjoy seeing landscapes and city views that feel completely different what I'm used to.

✓ Probably in another country I enjoy seeing landscapes and city views that feel completely different from what I'm used to.

The sentence omits the correct article and preposition: 'other country' should be 'another country' because we refer to a nonspecific singular country and need the determiner 'another'. Also 'different what I'm used to' is missing the preposition 'from' before the comparative phrase; the correct structure is 'different from what I'm used to'. Replace 'other' with 'another' and insert 'from' to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× That said, when I'm traveling I also enjoy seeing the skyline and BG streets of a new city.

✓ That said, when I'm traveling I also enjoy seeing the skyline and big streets of a new city.

The original contains 'BG streets' which appears to be a typo or incorrect abbreviation. If the intended word is 'big', use 'big streets'. If it were an abbreviation, it is unclear; here replacing with 'big' corrects usage. Also ensure no extra preposition is needed; the rest of the sentence is correct.

× Yes, although I usually only take a few photos because they never really capture how beautiful the place looks.

✓ Yes, although I usually only take a few photos because they never really capture how beautiful a place looks.

The phrase 'the place' suggests a specific place already known; if speaking generally about places, use 'a place'. This is a singular/plural/choice of article issue related to referent specificity. Changing to 'a place' makes the statement general and consistent with 'taking photos of different views'.