Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No + lí do chính), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu minh hoạ có chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi, cảm xúc, lúc nào). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ “it’s make me” → “it makes me”) và từ không phù hợp (“gassy universe” không rõ nghĩa). Giữ tối đa 5 câu và dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, for example, so).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me relax and capture beautiful moments. For example, I often photograph beaches at sunset because the warm light and calm waves create a peaceful atmosphere. I also like taking wide shots of mountains to show their scale and texture.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và súc tích (I prefer rural areas because...). Nêu lý do rõ ràng và cụ thể, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để minh hoạ (ví dụ: tiếng chim, không khí trong lành). Sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc (because, so, for example). Giữ dưới 5 câu.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are usually quieter and less crowded. For example, I love watching rice fields at sunrise: the fresh air and bird songs make me feel very relaxed. In contrast, urban views often feel busy and noisy.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng (I prefer views in my own country because...), sửa cấu trúc câu và từ vựng không chính xác (“most nationalities” sai ngữ cảnh). Nêu ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm (ví dụ: Ha Long Bay, terraced fields) và giải thích ngắn lý do (văn hoá, cảnh đẹp đa dạng). Tránh lặp từ và giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam offers a wide variety of landscapes and unique cultural scenery. For example, Ha Long Bay has stunning limestone karsts, while the terraced fields in Sa Pa are beautiful in autumn. These places make me proud and eager to photograph them.

× To be honest, I really like taking pictures of different views because I realize the beautiful scenery aspect.

✓ To be honest, I really like taking pictures of different views because I appreciate the beauty of the scenery.

The phrase 'realize the beautiful scenery aspect' is ungrammatical and unnatural. Use 'appreciate the beauty of the scenery' to express understanding and enjoyment. Improve by using correct verb collocations (appreciate + noun) and natural noun phrases.

× Spectacular scenery because it's make me feel relaxed.

✓ Spectacular scenery makes me feel relaxed.

This sentence fragment lacks a proper subject-verb structure and uses incorrect verb form 'make'. Combine into one sentence with subject 'Spectacular scenery' and correct verb form 'makes' (third-person singular).

× For example when I see a beach.

✓ For example, when I see a beach, I feel relaxed.

The original is a sentence fragment missing a main verb and object. Add a main clause to complete the sentence. Also add commas for clarity. Ensure tense matches present simple for habitual feeling.

× Also the gassy universe is made me feel.

✓ Also, the misty atmosphere makes me feel peaceful.

'Gassy universe' and 'is made me feel' are ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a natural noun phrase like 'misty atmosphere' and correct verb 'makes' plus an appropriate adjective 'peaceful'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear meaning.

× Personally, I realize the views in rural areas because this view is make is make me feel.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel relaxed.

'Realize the views' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. The clause repeats 'is make is make' and has wrong verb forms. Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'views' and present simple 'make' for habitual reaction.

× It make me feel too relaxed and I I think it's so peaceful because in Sydney it's so crowded and make me feel make me feel.

✓ They make me feel very relaxed, and I think rural areas are so peaceful, while Sydney is very crowded and makes me feel stressed.

Multiple problems: subject-verb agreement ('It make' -> 'They make' or 'It makes'), repetition, and unclear contrast. Use parallel clauses, correct verb forms ('makes'), and provide a clear opposite feeling 'stressed' to contrast 'relaxed'.

× I think I realized my views in my in my country because Vietnam is one of the most nationalities in the world, which is beautiful because it has a lot of spectacular sceneries.

✓ I think I prefer the views in my country because Vietnam is one of the most beautiful countries in the world; it has a lot of spectacular scenery.

'Realized my views' and 'most nationalities' are incorrect. Use 'prefer' and 'most beautiful countries'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'spectacular scenery' not 'sceneries'. Fix word order and clarity.

× Also is habit mountains and the other place.

✓ There are also many mountains and other interesting places.

This sentence lacks a subject and has wrong word choices ('is habit mountains'). Use 'There are' to introduce existence and correct nouns 'many mountains' and 'other interesting places' for clarity.