Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct: use full sentences, avoid filler words (uh), and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Use correct forms (e.g., 'I like taking', 'different views', 'I prefer candid shots').

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. In particular, I like candid shots of the seaside because the light and movement make images more lively. For example, I often photograph waves and people walking on the beach to capture natural moments.

제안: Give a concise direct answer, reduce repetition and fillers, and use linking words to compare. Correct singular/plural and comparative structures. Provide a specific reason and one brief example.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a variety of scenes, such as skyline silhouettes and bustling streets. For example, I enjoy photographing rooftops at sunset where the contrast between buildings and sky creates dramatic images.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating fillers. Use correct phrasing ('I prefer views in my own country') and be specific about reasons, give one or two examples and a linking phrase. Avoid vague claims like 'more better'.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because India has diverse landmarks and landscapes to photograph. For instance, I enjoy shooting the Taj Mahal at dawn for its soft light and the Golden Temple for its reflective pools, which offer unique photo opportunities.

× Yes, I like take.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures.

After 'like' when expressing preference in general, the gerund form (verb + -ing) is required. Use 'taking' instead of the base verb 'take' and include the object 'pictures' for clarity.

× I love taking pictures of different view.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'view' here should be plural because 'different' implies multiple kinds; use 'views'. This is an adjective-noun agreement issue where the adjective 'different' requires a plural noun when referring to multiple items.

× Uh, candid pictures are more into.

✓ Uh, I am more into candid pictures.

The original word order and preposition are incorrect. The correct expression is 'be into something' meaning to like something; the subject 'I' is needed, and 'into' follows 'into' as part of the phrase 'be into' with the object 'candid pictures'.

× I am honestly speaking, I love taking pictures of the seaside and the beaches.

✓ Honestly, I love taking pictures of the seaside and the beach.

The phrase 'I am honestly speaking' is awkward; 'Honestly,' is a natural adverbial opener. Use 'the seaside and the beach' or simply 'the seaside and beaches' but avoid redundant plural when paired with 'the'. This also improves pronoun/phrase usage and naturalness.

× Uh, personally speaking, I prefer view in uh, urban area because urban areas are City side which have different shots, different kind of views.

✓ Uh, personally speaking, I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are the city side which have different shots and different kinds of views.

Use plural 'views' and 'urban areas'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'city side' to specify that meaning. Also 'different kinds of views' requires plural 'kinds' and proper conjunction 'and' between items.

× We can enjoy a beautiful sunset, a beautiful sunrise.

✓ We can enjoy a beautiful sunset and a beautiful sunrise.

This is not a strict agreement error but requires conjunction 'and' to connect two parallel noun phrases correctly. It clarifies the sentence and improves grammatical structure.

× Uh Moreover, rural areas are also nice, but better than not better than urban areas.

✓ Moreover, rural areas are also nice, but they are not better than urban areas.

The original uses a confusing double negative 'better than not better than'. Use 'they are not better than' to compare clearly and add the subject 'they' for clarity.

× Uh, as I am from India, I prefer views in my own country as there are multiple things we can go and capture like Taj Mahal, Redford, Golden Temple in Amritsar and many more.

✓ As I am from India, I prefer views in my own country because there are many places we can go and capture, such as the Taj Mahal, Red Fort, and the Golden Temple in Amritsar.

Use 'because' instead of repetitive 'as', 'many places' is more natural than 'multiple things', and 'go and capture' should be 'go and capture' or simply 'visit and photograph'. Proper names need correct forms: 'Red Fort' not 'Redford'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and include articles 'the' for famous monuments.

× Uh, so I think uh, it's more better to prefer our country rather than other countries.

✓ So I think it's better to prefer our country rather than other countries.

'More better' is a double comparative and incorrect; use 'better' alone. Also 'prefer' already expresses choice; 'prefer our country to other countries' is more concise. Avoid filler 'uh' for clearer spoken sentence.