Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然但有重复与停顿，需要更简洁且句子结构更清楚。建议：1) 去掉填充词（如 uh）并减少重复表达；2) 开头用一句主题句直接回答，然后用1-2句具体细节说明拍照的原因或场景；3) 使用连接词（e.g. because, so, for example）使条理更清晰。示例结构：主题句 + 原因/例子。

예시: Yes, I do. I like taking photos whenever I travel or visit different cities because it helps me record memories. For example, when I visit a new campus I often take pictures of buildings and streets to remember the atmosphere.

제안: 回答表达清楚但有语法与词汇问题，句子不够流畅。建议：1) 用更自然的主句，例如 “I prefer urban views”; 2) 修正语法（e.g. 'architecture'为不可数名词，表达 should be 'the architecture makes me feel'）；3) 补充1个具体细节或例子并用连接词（because, for instance）。

예시: I prefer urban views because I love the architecture and the busy city atmosphere. For instance, tall historic buildings and modern skyscrapers often make me feel fascinated by human creativity.

제안: 回答含混且有很多停顿与重复，逻辑稍欠清晰。建议：1) 先给出明确立场（e.g. I prefer views in other countries）；2) 用一两句说明原因并给出具体期望（例如想看不同文化、建筑或自然景观）；3) 避免重复和不完整的句子，使用连接词（because, so, for example）。

예시: I would prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and landscapes. For example, I want to see unique architecture, colourful markets and natural scenery that are different from what I see at home.

× taking my school schools at different cities

✓ taking my school in different cities

原句中“school schools”重复使用名词，且与上下文应为单数或单一机构的不同分支，正确表达为“my school in different cities”或直接说“schools in different cities”。建议简化并避免重复名词。

× Each time I go to different places like traveling and just uh, taking my school schools at different cities, I would just record my life by taking a lot of pictures in different places in different views and it is a very great way to, uh, record what I saw before.

✓ Each time I go to different places, like when traveling or visiting my school in different cities, I record my life by taking a lot of pictures of different places and views; it’s a great way to record what I have seen.

原句中动词形式混乱（"like traveling and just uh, taking"），建议用结构清晰的短语“when traveling or visiting”。同时将“would just record”改为一般现在时“record”，因为是在描述习惯。最后用现在完成时“have seen”更自然地表达“之前看到的东西”。这些修改都在动词形式和时态一致性范围内。

× Those architecture makes me feel like I was living in a great time in a great civilization.

✓ Those buildings/That architecture makes me feel like I am living in a great era of civilisation.

原句有两处问题：一是“architecture”是不可数名词或应使用复数“architectural works”，但句中用了复数指示词“Those”，更自然是用“Those buildings”或“This architecture”。二是动词“makes”与主语搭配若用复数需用“make”；若改为“That architecture makes...”则保留单数。时态方面表达现在的感受用现在时（"I am living"），而不是过去时“was”。建议选择一致的主语形式并统一时态。

× Like it is a masterpiece of by the humans and.

✓ It is like a masterpiece created by humans.

原句有多余介词“of by”和句尾不完整。应删除多余词并补全主语谓语结构，使用“created by humans”简洁地表达“人类创造的杰作”。同时不用定冠词“the humans”，一般用“humans”或“people”。

× Umm, I think our life, the views in other countries.

✓ Umm, I think I prefer the views in other countries.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语和明确表达。根据上下文意图应回答偏好，用“prefer”构成完整句子。建议避免口语填充词过多，保持句子完整。

× Umm, although I, I've never been to any, uh, foreign countries before, I still feel like I, I'm a type of person who like, who like the new things and new areas and new sceneries.

✓ Although I have never been to any foreign countries before, I still feel that I am the type of person who likes new things, new places, and new scenery.

原句代词重复（"I, I've"）且谓语与主语在人称数上不一致（"who like" 应为 "who likes"，因为先行词是"type of person"单数）。另外“new sceneries”通常用不可数名词“scenery”。句子中不必要的停顿词应删去以保持连贯。

× I just want to see something new and more colorful, more diversified and more magnificent in the.

✓ I just want to see something new — more colorful, more diverse, and more magnificent.

原句结尾不完整（"in the."），并且形容词并列形式应用一致性（用形容词“diverse”比“diversified”更自然）。移除多余介词并整理并列结构使句子完整自然。