Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with brief explanations. Avoid filler words and correct mistakes in word choice (e.g., "well-settled clouds" → "dramatic cloud formations"). Use linking words like "for example" and "also" to connect ideas. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I like capturing well-decorated restaurant corners because they show local culture and atmosphere, and I also enjoy dramatic cloud formations at sunset since they create striking contrasts. Additionally, I often photograph my coffee and everyday scenes to document daily life.

제안: Make a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitations and repetitions (e.g., "rural rural"). Use linking words such as "because" and "for example." Correct grammar: "I've been in urban areas" and "when I travel." Keep the response to three sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer more unique and varied scenery. For example, when I travel to the countryside I find unusual landscapes and traditional villages that are interesting to photograph. Also, rural scenes feel fresher compared with the repetitive city views I've seen for years.

제안: Start with a clear statement of preference, then explain why with specific details and an example. Avoid repetition ("capturing the photo, capturing photo") and filler phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Fix grammar: "I don't travel much around my country" and "the countryside has many beautiful places." Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer taking photos in my own country because I haven't explored it much and there are many beautiful countryside scenes to discover. For example, I often photograph traditional houses and rolling fields that reflect local culture and natural beauty.

× I really like to take a picture of the really exotic views, for example, like restaurants corners, well decorated corners or just like, uh wells settled the clouds on the sky or like a really good coffee.

✓ I really like taking pictures of exotic views, for example restaurant corners, well-decorated corners, clouds in the sky, or a really good cup of coffee.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form when expressing preferences (Verb + -ing form). Also plural forms and collocations were adjusted: 'take a picture' -> 'taking pictures' for general habit, 'restaurants corners' -> 'restaurant corners', 'well decorated corners' -> 'well-decorated corners', 'wells settled the clouds on the sky' was ungrammatical and changed to 'clouds in the sky', and 'a really good coffee' -> 'a really good cup of coffee'. Suggestion: use gerunds after verbs of liking and choose natural noun collocations.

× I like to drink and everyday life.

✓ I like to drink coffee and capture everyday life.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper structure (Sentence structure errors). It seems the student wanted to mention two habits: drinking coffee and photographing everyday life. The corrected sentence uses parallel structure 'like to drink coffee and capture everyday life' to make the meaning clear. Suggestion: keep parallel verbs and include necessary objects.

× So which is.

✓ So that's it.

This fragment is incomplete and does not form a full sentence (Sentence structure errors). 'So that's it.' conveys a finishing remark. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; complete the thought.

× I would prefer the rural areas cause, umm, I've been an urban areas for a long time 'cause it feels like really common and not that, uh, unique.

✓ I would prefer rural areas because I've been in urban areas for a long time; they feel common and not very unique.

Preposition 'in' is required with 'been' when referring to being located in a place (Incorrect use of prepositions). Also 'the rural areas' -> 'rural areas' is more natural, and 'cause' -> 'because'. Suggestion: use 'been in' for locations and avoid unnecessary articles.

× The rural rural area has a lot of views to pick a capture, uh, when I traveling around the.

✓ Rural areas have many scenes to capture when I travel around.

Multiple issues: repetition 'rural rural', wrong noun choice 'views to pick a capture', and incorrect verb form 'when I traveling' (Sentence structure errors and tense). Corrected to concise natural phrasing with correct present simple 'travel'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'scenes' or 'views to capture', and use correct verb forms.

× Firstly, I really enjoy capturing the photo, capturing photo in my country 'cause I have, I don't really travel around my country.

✓ Firstly, I really enjoy capturing photos in my country because I don't really travel around it.

After 'enjoy' use gerund form 'capturing' (Verb + -ing form) — already used but 'the photo, capturing photo' was redundant. Also 'my country' repeated; replaced second instance with pronoun 'it'. 'Because' is the correct conjunction. Suggestion: use gerund and avoid redundancy.

× So first of all I really like to capture a picture around my countryside.

✓ First of all, I really like to capture pictures around the countryside.

'My countryside' is unnatural in English; 'the countryside' is the correct article usage (Article errors). Also 'a picture' -> 'pictures' for general preference. Suggestion: use 'the countryside' when referring to rural areas in general.

× So we have a lot of beauty.

✓ There is a lot of beauty.

While understandable, using 'we have a lot of beauty' is awkward; 'There is a lot of beauty' is the natural way to express existence of beauty (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and There be issue). Suggestion: use 'there is/are' to talk about existence.