Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places. For example, last year I took a photo in front of a mountain, and whenever I look at it I remember that fun day exactly.

제안: Clarify the preference and avoid filler words. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you prefer urban or rural views, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., "calm you down").

예시: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing. For example, being surrounded by trees and fields calms me down and helps me concentrate better on my thoughts.

제안: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. State your preference clearly, then give specific comparisons and an example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however") and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they tend to offer more varied natural scenery. For example, while my country has mainly desert landscapes with sparse vegetation, other countries I have visited had mountains, forests and lakes, which I find more interesting.

× Yes, I like because in the future I can't see those pictures and I remember the place and for example, last year I taken a picture in front of the mountain and I remember it exactly and it was a fun day.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because in the future I can look at those photos and remember the place. For example, last year I took a picture in front of a mountain and I remember it exactly; it was a fun day.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and tense consistency. 'I like because' needs a verb+ing to indicate activity: 'I like taking pictures'. 'I can't see those pictures' is incorrect meaning; use 'can look at those photos' to indicate viewing in future. 'I remember' should be adjusted for clarity with future/ongoing sense, but present is fine when stating a fact. 'I taken a picture' is wrong; past simple 'took' is required. Also avoid run-on sentence by splitting into two sentences. Suggestion: use correct verb forms (like taking, can look, took) and separate clauses for clarity.

× Oh, I prefer in your brain, brain, uh, because it's nice and, uh, it, it can climb you down and it helps you to be focused in your life and yeah.

✓ Oh, I prefer rural views because they're peaceful; they can calm you down and help you focus in life.

Errors: incorrect preposition and unclear phrase 'in your brain' and incorrect verb 'climb you down'. The speaker likely means 'rural views' or 'quiet places' and 'calm you down'. Use 'prefer' followed by the noun phrase (no preposition 'in'). Use 'calm you down' (phrasal verb) and 'help you focus' (infinitive without 'to' after 'help' is acceptable, but 'help you to focus' also works). Suggestion: choose the correct noun (rural views), remove incorrect prepositions, and use standard verbs 'calm' and 'help'.

× Oh, I prefer in other countries because other countries has more other countries have more views, natural views like for example.

✓ Oh, I prefer other countries because they have more natural scenery, for example.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and redundant phrasing. 'Prefer in other countries' should be 'prefer other countries' (no 'in'). 'Other countries has' is wrong; plural subject needs 'have'. The original repeats phrases and misorders words. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'they have' for plural subjects, and use 'natural scenery' or 'natural views'.

× And in my country it's limited. It just only uh, deserts and less less grasses. So I prefer other countries.

✓ In my country, the scenery is limited. There are mostly deserts and very little grass, so I prefer other countries.

Errors: 'it's limited' is vague; better noun 'scenery is limited'. 'Deserts and less less grasses' has pluralization and quantifier errors: use 'mostly deserts' and 'very little grass' (uncountable). Use 'there are' to introduce plural/uncountable nouns. Suggestion: use appropriate quantifiers for uncountable nouns ('little grass') and correct plurality.