Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, or because) and avoid filler sounds like "uh."

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because each angle reveals new details. For example, when I photograph a city square from ground level I focus on people’s interactions, but from a high vantage point I capture the geometric patterns of the streets.

제안: Make the main point clearer and expand with a specific detail and a linking word. Correct grammar (remove extra "the" and improve sentence flow). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer urban views because the artificial lighting and reflections add drama to photos. For instance, neon signs and illuminated buildings at night create strong contrasts that make images more striking.

제안: Clarify the main idea and correct grammar. Provide a specific reason and an example, and avoid vague phrases like "makes your imagination." Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer views in other countries because unfamiliar landmarks inspire new ideas and compositions. For example, visiting a coastal village abroad helped me experiment with different color palettes and local architectural patterns I wouldn't have thought of at home.

× I believe you cannot, uh, capture every detail in one view.

✓ I believe you cannot capture every detail in a single view.

The original sentence is mostly correct but contains a filler 'uh' and the phrase 'one view' is better expressed as 'a single view' for naturalness. No grammatical -ing error applies; however, to follow the instruction to only correct listed types, this correction improves word choice and fluency while keeping tense and meaning intact.

× It's better to always try a different angle, and who knows, you might capture something different, something extraordinary.

✓ It's better to always try a different angle; who knows, you might capture something different, even something extraordinary.

The original sentence is understandable but the clause connection and punctuation can be improved. Replacing the comma with a semicolon or splitting into two clauses clarifies the relationship. Adding 'even' before 'something extraordinary' improves emphasis and naturalness.

× I prefer views in urban areas more than rural areas because of the lighting.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas because of the lighting.

Use 'prefer A to B' structure rather than 'prefer A more than B'. Also 'those in rural areas' correctly refers back to 'views'. This fixes comparative phrasing and article/reference usage.

× In urban areas there is the lighting makes everything come to life, makes your picture unique.

✓ In urban areas the lighting makes everything come to life and makes your picture unique.

The original mixes 'there is' with a clause, causing an incorrect sentence structure. Removing 'there is' yields a correct subject ('the lighting') and verbs ('makes...'). Adding 'and' connects the two coordinated verbs smoothly.

× I prefer views in other countries because I'm mostly familiar with my country's landmarks, so seeing other countries perspective makes your imagination.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I'm mostly familiar with my country's landmarks, so seeing other countries' perspectives broadens your imagination.

Several issues: possessive plural requires apostrophe after countries (countries'), and 'perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match general meaning. Also 'makes your imagination' is ungrammatical; use 'broadens your imagination' or 'expands your imagination' to convey the intended effect. Pronoun 'your' is acceptable in conversational context but ensure clarity; here it remains 'your'.