Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g. "I do like" and "I take a lot of photos" repeated ideas), and add one specific detail to enrich the response. Use a linking word to connect the two ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I travel on holiday, I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember each place; for example, I keep a photo album of mountain vistas and coastal scenes.

제안: The answer communicates a clear preference but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Begin with a direct statement ("I prefer..."), remove unnecessary words, and give a brief specific reason using a linking word (e.g. "because" or "as"). Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I love natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy wide green fields and quiet forests, which feel more peaceful than busy city streets.

제안: The response answers the question but has several grammar and clarity issues and repeats ideas. State your preference clearly, correct grammar (e.g. "my own country"), and give a specific supporting detail or brief example. Use linking words to make it coherent (e.g. "because", "for example").

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has stunning natural landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing Himalayan mountain ranges and terraced hillsides rather than crowded urban skylines.

× Yes I do like taking pictures of different views as I travel a lot in my holidays so I take a lot of photos.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I travel a lot during my holidays, so I take many photos.

The sentence needs small grammatical and word-choice fixes. Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clearer cause in spoken English (preposition use but primarily clarity). 'During my holidays' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'A lot of photos' is informal; 'many photos' is more appropriate. Also add commas to separate clauses. Keep the verb + -ing 'taking' which is correct here.

× Will I prefer seeing views in rural areas because in those areas that there will be a nature and greenery scenery that I like the most?

✓ I prefer seeing views in rural areas because there is natural greenery and scenery there that I like the most.

'Will I prefer' is incorrect modal/question form here; the student should state preference in present simple 'I prefer'. 'There will be' is wrong for general description; use 'there is'. The phrase 'a nature and greenery scenery' is ungrammatical—use 'natural greenery and scenery'. Remove unnecessary 'that' and restructure for clarity.

× I prefer seeing my views in my own countries own country because Nepal is raised in natural beauty and I prefer seeing natural beauty rather than seeing tall and small buildings in other countries cities.

✓ I prefer seeing views in my own country because Nepal is rich in natural beauty, and I prefer natural scenery to the tall and small buildings in other countries' cities.

Multiple errors: 'my own countries own country' is incorrect—should be 'my own country' (singular). 'Raised in natural beauty' is incorrect verb choice; use 'rich in natural beauty'. 'Seeing natural beauty rather than seeing tall and small buildings' is wordy; use 'prefer natural scenery to...'. Also use possessive plural 'countries' cities' with apostrophe placement (other countries' cities). These changes fix singular/plural and wording problems and improve idiomatic English.