Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, and expand slightly with a specific reason or example (but keep it under 5 sentences). Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I always photograph landscapes and city scenes because they remind me of the places I visited, and I can look back at them later. For example, last year I took many photos of coastal cliffs to remember the light at sunset.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and fix grammar and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and give one or two specific examples of what you like in rural areas. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones. Since I live in Hong Kong and see skyscrapers every day, I enjoy visiting the countryside because it offers natural scenes like mountains and coastlines where I can take peaceful landscape photos.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and explain specifically why you prefer views abroad with a concrete example. Avoid unclear phrases like "convert to humans" and replace them with clear ideas (e.g., different architectural styles or cultural details).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they showcase different architectural styles and cultural details. For instance, when I visited Italy I photographed baroque buildings and narrow streets, which are very different from the modern skyline at home.

× I like to taking pictures in every country.

✓ I like taking pictures in every country.

The verb like can be followed by either the infinitive (to take) or the gerund (taking), but not to + gerund. 'to taking' is incorrect. Use 'I like taking' or 'I like to take'. To improve, choose one pattern and be consistent: 'I like taking pictures' or 'I like to take pictures.'

× I like when I travel.

✓ I like taking pictures when I travel.

The original sentence is incomplete in this context and creates ambiguity: the speaker likely means they like taking pictures while traveling. Add the object 'taking pictures' to complete the idea and link it to 'when I travel.' This fixes the sentence structure by providing a clear verb phrase and time clause.

× But rural areas, umm can have a lot of some natural places, mountains, oceans that I.

✓ But rural areas can have many natural places, like mountains and oceans, that I enjoy.

The sentence has several issues: 'a lot of some' is incorrect quantifier usage and redundant; 'that I.' is an unfinished clause lacking a verb. Replace 'a lot of some' with 'many' or 'a lot of' and complete the clause with a verb such as 'enjoy.' Also remove filler 'umm' in formal responses. The corrected sentence uses proper pronoun reference and completes the thought.

× OK for me preferred other countries because other countries have their own culture and I love to see other countries architecture and learn script style.

✓ OK, for me I prefer other countries because they have their own cultures, and I love to see other countries' architecture and learn their writing styles.

'Preferred' is past tense but the speaker expresses a present preference; use present tense 'prefer.' Also plural/singular and possessive forms are incorrect: 'other countries architecture' should be 'other countries' architecture' (possessive) and 'culture' should be plural when referring to multiple countries. 'Script style' is unclear; 'writing styles' or 'scripts' is clearer. These corrections align tense and fix possessive and noun form errors.

× They have different styles and can convert to humans.

✓ They have different styles that can be conveyed to people.

The phrase 'convert to humans' is incorrect: 'convert' is the wrong verb and 'humans' is an odd object here. Likely the speaker means the styles can be communicated or appreciated by people. Replace 'convert to humans' with 'conveyed to people' or 'appreciated by people.' This fixes pronoun/reference and verb choice.