Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good direct response and clear reason. To improve, make the answer slightly more concise and add a specific example to make it more vivid. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar words (‘aesthetics’ and ‘beauty’ together are redundant).

예시: Yes, I do. I'm interested in photography, and taking pictures of landscapes helps me notice small details in nature. For example, when I photographed a sunrise at the beach last month, I appreciated the changing colors and the way the light reflected on the water.

제안: The answer addresses the question but is long, repetitive and contains errors and unclear phraseology (“counter side”, unfinished thought). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting reasons, and a linking word. Correct vocabulary and finish the idea. Keep to three sentences max.

예시: I prefer urban views to rural ones because I enjoy the city’s energy and variety. For instance, I like photographing busy streets and colorful market scenes, which show everyday life. Also, cities offer interesting architecture and contrast that I find fascinating.

제안: The response has good content but contains pronunciation/word-choice errors and fragmented sentences (“put the girls” unclear). Improve clarity by directly stating preference, giving specific examples of local scenery, and then briefly comparing with other countries using a linking word. Avoid listing generic words; give one concrete example.

예시: I prefer views in my own country, the Philippines, because of its abundant natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing the coconut-lined beaches and the dramatic rice terraces in Banaue. However, I also appreciate views abroad for their modern architecture and different cultural landscapes.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I'm interested in photography.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I am interested in photography.

Use of contraction 'I'm' is acceptable informally but to match formal speaking clarity keep 'I am'; however this is optional. No grammatical error; suggestion: use full form for clear pronunciation in speaking tests.

× It helps me to appreciate nature more and also the aesthetics and beauty of life.

✓ It helps me appreciate nature more and also appreciate the aesthetics and beauty of life.

The original repeats 'appreciate' implicitly; better parallel structure repeats the verb for clarity. Ensure verbs in series match in form ('helps me appreciate' not 'helps me to appreciate' is more natural). Suggestion: use parallel verbs for clarity.

× I prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas because ever since I was a child I always preferred being in the city rather than on the counter side because it is a lot more lively and there are a lot of people who mind their own business and I find it fascinating that.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas because, ever since I was a child, I have always preferred being in the city rather than in the countryside; it is much livelier, there are many people, and I find that fascinating.

Multiple issues: tense consistency (use present perfect 'have always preferred' for a preference continuing from childhood), wrong word 'counter side' should be 'countryside', awkward phrase 'people who mind their own business' is odd in this context so replaced with 'many people', sentence run-on fixed with punctuation and conjunctions. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary ('countryside'), maintain tense consistency, and break long sentences into clearer parts.

× Actually put the girls in my own country, which is the Philippines.

✓ Actually, put the girls in my own country, which is the Philippines.

This sentence is unclear and likely contains a transcription error 'put the girls'. If the intended meaning is 'I put the places in my own country' or 'I prefer the views in my own country', correct to 'I prefer the views in my own country, which is the Philippines.' Suggestion: use the correct subject and verb; ensure spoken words are transcribed accurately.

× Nature is very prominent, so I can see a lot of trees, oceans, seas, mountains, etcetera.

✓ Nature is very prominent there, so I can see many trees, the ocean, mountains, and so on.

List items need parallel and precise terms ('ocean' vs 'oceans, seas' redundant). Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for more natural speech. Suggestion: choose specific, non-redundant nouns and keep parallel structure.

× While in other countries I think it's a bit more modern than my own country, so I get to appreciate it too.

✓ In other countries, I think things are a bit more modern than in my own country, so I appreciate that too.

Maintain subject-verb agreement and parallel comparison: compare 'things are... more modern than in my own country' rather than 'it's... more modern than my own country' which incorrectly compares a singular 'it' to a country. Suggestion: explicitly state the subject ('things' or 'places') when comparing.