Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers ("umm") and repetition ("especially" twice). Also correct grammar (e.g., "areas with beautiful natural scenery," "I often choose mountains and coastlines because of the light").

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because I enjoy exploring new places. For example, I often photograph greenery in the mountains or along coastlines, since the natural light there creates dramatic colours and contrasts.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with one specific reason and a brief example. Fix grammar and use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example"). Replace vague phrases like "the peaceful" with "the peace" or "the peaceful atmosphere."

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the countryside and appreciate the peace there. For example, my region is surrounded by hills and mountains, so I can often photograph quiet valleys and forested slopes.

제안: Be concise and avoid repeating the country name. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Remove fillers and complete unfinished phrases (e.g., "coastline mountains" -> "coastal mountains").

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Thailand offers diverse and beautiful landscapes. For instance, our coastal mountains and beaches provide dramatic scenery and many interesting tourist spots to photograph.

× Yes, I love taking photos of different views because I enjoy exploring new places, especially area with beautiful natural scenery, especially umm greenery places often choose mountains and coastlines because the light.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of different views because I enjoy exploring new places, especially areas with beautiful natural scenery, such as green places; I often choose mountains and coastlines because of the light.

Errors: 'area' should be plural 'areas' to match 'places' (adjective/noun form); 'greenery places' is awkward—use 'green places' or 'areas with greenery'; missing preposition 'because of the light'. Suggestion: Use parallel structure and clear nouns, make plurals agree, and include necessary prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the countryside. I enjoy the peaceful and my country is surrounded by hill, mountains and beautiful nature.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the countryside. I enjoy the peacefulness, and my country is surrounded by hills, mountains, and beautiful natural scenery.

Errors: 'the peaceful' is incomplete; use noun 'peacefulness' or 'peace'. 'my country is surrounded by hill, mountains' — 'hill' should be plural 'hills' and items should be parallel; 'beautiful nature' is better as 'beautiful natural scenery'. Suggestion: Use complete noun forms, pluralize countable nouns, and maintain parallel lists. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Absolutely, I prefer the views in my own country because Thailand has very beautiful views and there are lots of tourist attractions in Thailand and beautiful umm coastline mountains in my.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer the views in my own country because Thailand has very beautiful scenery, many tourist attractions, and beautiful coastlines and mountains.

Errors: Repetition and incomplete phrase 'coastline mountains in my' is ungrammatical. 'Views' is okay but 'scenery' is more natural; 'lots of' can be formalized to 'many'. Combine items in a parallel list 'coastlines and mountains'. Suggestion: Remove redundancies, complete phrases, and use parallel structure for lists. Grammar problem type ID:12