Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (present tense), avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details linked with a transition word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like photographing mountains and village scenes because they capture unique colors and textures. Moreover, taking photos helps me preserve memories from my trips.

제안: Give a clear opinion first and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (comparisons, singular/plural) and avoid awkward phrases like "more gives a raw image." Limit to three sentences with concrete specifics (sound, light, pace).

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and cinematic. For instance, the soft light at sunrise and the quiet surroundings make landscapes look more natural and striking. In contrast, urban scenes are energetic and visually busy.

제안: Fix major errors and be direct: use correct words (not "abuse") and concise reasons. Provide one or two specific reasons or examples and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep it natural and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes and people. For example, I love the coastal cliffs near my hometown and hope to visit several national parks there in the future.

× Yes, I enjoyed taking pictures of a different videos because capturing a mountain, valleys, different different cities, village, exploring new things is really good for me and I enjoy that thing. Creating memories makes me happy and I like it.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because capturing mountains, valleys, cities, and villages and exploring new things is really good for me, and I enjoy it. Creating memories makes me happy.

Issues: 'enjoyed' uses past tense but context asks about general liking, so present tense 'enjoy' is correct (Problem ID 6 Present tense issue). 'a different videos' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use plural 'different views' (Problem ID 1 Singular and plural issue). 'capturing a mountain, valleys, different different cities, village' has inconsistent number forms and repetition; use plural nouns consistently and remove duplicate word (Problems ID 1 and 26 Sentence structure errors). 'exploring new things' should be connected with 'and' and included as a gerund phrase to parallel 'capturing' (Problem ID 8 Verb + -ing form). Suggestion: Use present simple for general preferences, ensure noun number agreement, avoid repetition, and parallel structure for lists.

× I prefer a view in rural areas because rural areas are more cinematic and peaceful and I think that rural areas are really more gives a raw image than urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are more cinematic and peaceful, and I think rural areas give a rawer image than urban areas.

Issues: 'a view in rural areas' mixes singular 'a view' with plural 'rural areas' and should be plural 'views' (Problem ID 1 Singular and plural issue). 'rural areas are really more gives' is ungrammatical: 'gives' does not agree with plural subject and word order is wrong (Problem ID 27 Subject-verb agreement errors and ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Use comparative form 'rawer' rather than 'more gives a raw image' for clarity (Problem ID 25 Comparative and superlative errors). Suggestion: Match singular/plural, use correct verb forms for plural subjects, and use standard comparative constructions.

× But urban areas are really more aesthetic and fast moving life.

✓ But urban areas are more aesthetic and have a fast-moving lifestyle.

Issues: 'really more aesthetic' is redundant; use 'more aesthetic' if comparative needed (Problem ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'fast moving life' is noun phrase with missing hyphen and incorrect noun choice; use 'fast-moving lifestyle' (Problem ID 18 Incorrect order of adjectives and ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: Use appropriate adjective forms and compound adjectives with hyphens when modifying nouns, and choose the correct noun ('lifestyle') to convey meaning.

× I prefer abuse in my own country because I believe that my country is the most beautiful and prettiest country because I love people, I love place where I am and there are also certain places that I wanted to be there in the future.

✓ I prefer staying in my own country because I believe it is the most beautiful and prettiest place; I love the people and the place where I live, and there are also certain places I want to visit in the future.

Issues: 'I prefer abuse' is likely a wrong word choice; 'abuse' should be 'about' or more likely 'staying'—context indicates preference for being in own country (Problem ID 26 Sentence structure errors and ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns). 'my country is the most beautiful and prettiest country' is redundant: 'most beautiful' and 'prettiest' mean the same; use one (Problem ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'I love place where I am' lacks articles and correct verb tense; use 'the place where I live' (Problems ID 17 Incorrect use of the definite article and ID 6 Present tense issue). 'there are also certain places that I wanted to be there in the future' mixes past tense 'wanted' with future intention and has redundant 'there'; use present tense 'want' and 'visit' (Problem ID 5 Past tense issue and ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: Choose correct verbs for intended meaning, avoid redundant adjectives, use correct pronouns and articles, and maintain consistent tense for future intentions ('want to visit').