Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (umm) and unclear phrases ("drawing picture the scratches"). Mention how often or why you do it. For example, say you take photos and later make sketches from them, and give a time frame.

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos of interesting scenes and later make quick sketches at home because it helps me remember details. For example, after a trip I usually spend one or two days refining my sketches and choosing the best photos to work from.

제안: Give a direct statement and support it with specific reasons and clear linking words. Correct word choices (e.g. "urban views", "scenery", "peaceful atmosphere"). Explain what you like about urban areas with one clear example to sound natural and coherent.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and lively streets. For instance, city parks and riverside promenades combine natural scenery with interesting buildings, which creates a peaceful yet vibrant atmosphere.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific, accurate reasons and a brief comparison. Avoid unclear phrases ("their necks"). If comparing countries, name or describe features precisely and use linking words like "because" or "however."

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful beaches and coastal landscapes. In contrast, Korea has fewer beaches in certain regions, so I find my home country's seaside scenery more appealing.

× Yes I do umm not only taking pictures of different views, I also drawing picture the scratches after I go home because I love trying and for example I usually spend 2 days.

✓ Yes, I do. Not only do I take pictures of different views, I also draw pictures of the sketches after I go home because I love practicing; for example, I usually spend two days.

Errors: incorrect verb forms 'taking' and 'drawing' where base verb forms are required in this sentence structure; missing auxiliary 'do' for negative/inverted 'not only' construction; 'picture the scratches' is unclear and likely meant 'pictures of the sketches'; 'trying' should be 'practicing' to express repeated effort; numeral should be spelled as 'two' in formal speech. Suggestion: use correct verb forms with auxiliary verbs (Not only do I take... I also draw...), choose precise nouns ('sketches'), and use consistent tense and vocabulary.

× I think I prefer urban areas view because I love view that have beautiful sceneries and landscape.

✓ I think I prefer urban views because I love views that have beautiful scenery and landscapes.

Errors: 'urban areas view' and 'love view' are singular/plural mismatch and incorrect noun collocations; 'sceneries' is rarely used in English—use 'scenery' (uncountable); 'landscape' should be plural or paired properly. Suggestion: use plural 'views' for general preference, use uncountable 'scenery', and 'landscapes' if referring to multiple scenes.

× Not only that, I love the significance view from peaceful.

✓ I also like peaceful views because they feel meaningful to me.

Errors: awkward phrase 'the significance view from peaceful' is ungrammatical—mixes noun forms and word order. Suggestion: rephrase to a natural expression such as 'peaceful views' and explain why you like them ('they feel meaningful' or 'they are peaceful').

× I prefer views in my own countries because their necks has many beautiful and magnificent beaches, but in Korea there's no beach there and it's don't have scenery beautiful like the.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful and magnificent beaches, but in Korea there are no beaches and it doesn't have scenery as beautiful.

Errors: 'countries' should be singular 'country' to match 'my own'; 'their necks has' is meaningless and incorrect pronoun and noun usage; subject-verb agreement errors 'has' with plural/singular mismatch and 'it's don't' is wrong ('it doesn't'). 'beach' should be plural 'beaches'; awkward ending 'like the' incomplete. Suggestion: use correct singular/plural forms and pronouns ('my country', 'it has'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and complete comparative structure ('as beautiful').