Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I love taking pictures"), avoid redundancy ("reminds me of the places" repeats "memories"), and limit to up to 3–4 short sentences. Add one specific example to make it more vivid.

예시: I love taking pictures of different views because they serve as my personal photo diary. For example, when I visited a mountain village last year I photographed the sunrise, which helps me remember the colours and atmosphere. It’s a simple way to keep memories of places I’ve been.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then briefly explain with one clear reason and an example. Avoid filler phrases ("Well", repeated words, grammatical errors like "every places") and aim for varied vocabulary (e.g., "urban skylines," "countryside scenes"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I don’t prefer one over the other; I enjoy both urban and rural views. Urban skylines interest me because of their architecture and energy, while countryside scenes calm me with open fields — for example, I love city rooftops at night and quiet coastal villages during the day.

제안: Structure the answer: state your preference, give clear reasons, and provide a brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., "natural resources" or "natural scenery"), avoid repetition, and be concise. If you choose your country, explain why specifically (culture, landscapes, accessibility).

예시: I prefer taking photos in my own country, the Philippines, because it has diverse natural scenery from beaches to mountains that I can visit easily. For instance, I often photograph coral reefs and limestone cliffs that you don’t find at home, which makes local scenes special to me.

× Yes, I love to take taking pictures of different views because it is served as my dump and memories of the places that I've been to and it also reminds me of the places.

✓ Yes, I love to take pictures of different views because they serve as my dump and memories of the places I've been to, and they also remind me of those places.

The original contains an incorrect verb + -ing sequence 'to take taking'; choose either 'to take pictures' (infinitive) or 'taking pictures' (gerund). Also 'it is served as' is incorrect verb form and subject agreement; use 'they serve as' to match plural 'pictures'. Use 'remind' not 'reminds' to agree with plural subject. Replace 'the places that I've been to' with 'the places I've been to' for concision and change second 'the places' to 'those places' to avoid repetition.

× I would say both. I love the urban and rural areas views I have.

✓ I would say both. I love the views of both urban and rural areas.

The phrase 'urban and rural areas views I have' has incorrect word order and uses 'areas' and 'views' awkwardly. Place 'views' after 'love' and use 'of both urban and rural areas' to make a clear noun phrase. This corrects adjective + noun order and clarifies meaning.

× Well beauty is subjective and I believe that every places is differently or uniquely beautiful to me so I I love both views.

✓ Well, beauty is subjective, and I believe that every place is different or uniquely beautiful to me, so I love both kinds of views.

Errors: missing comma after 'Well'; 'every places' mixes 'every' with plural—use singular 'every place'; 'is differently' misuses adverb where adjective 'different' is needed after 'is'; repeated 'I I' is a typo; 'both views' clarified to 'both kinds of views'. This fixes agreement and adjective/adverb usage.

× Well, there are some parts that I love the views of my country while here in the Philippines, we have a lot of natural resources natures, but I would also love to take a photo or views of another country because it's different.

✓ Well, there are some parts of my country that I love. Here in the Philippines, we have a lot of natural resources and nature, but I would also love to take photos of other countries because they are different.

Sentence was long and had incorrect structure. 'There are some parts that I love the views of my country' is awkward—rephrase to 'parts of my country that I love'. 'Natural resources natures' is incorrect duplication; use 'natural resources and nature' or just 'natural beauty'. Use plural 'photos' to match general practice and 'other countries' plural. Change 'it's different' to 'they are different' to agree with plural 'countries'.

× Well, both are uniquely beautiful, but I would choose the Philippines here in my country.

✓ Well, both are uniquely beautiful, but I would choose the Philippines, my home country.

Phrase 'the Philippines here in my country' is redundant and awkward. Use apposition 'the Philippines, my home country' or 'the Philippines, where I'm from'. This corrects article and phrasing to sound natural.