Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and a bit long. Aim to use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details, and vary vocabulary to avoid repeating “I love taking pictures” and “beautiful.” Also try to use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, I like capturing striking architecture in cities and sweeping natural landscapes like mountain ranges and coastal scenes, because each place tells a different visual story.

제안: Good clear opinion and reasons, but avoid filler phrases like “In my opinion, I think.” Be more concise and use one or two precise supporting details with a linking word. Also replace vague words like “more scenic views” with specific examples.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful. For instance, I enjoy photographing tree-lined lanes, rolling hills and rustic cottages, whereas cities often feel crowded and less photogenic.

제안: Clear preference and personal experience are good, but reduce repetition (avoid repeating “I love”) and add a specific contrast with your country. Use one linking phrase and provide one concrete example of what you liked in Europe to make the answer more vivid.

예시: I prefer views abroad, especially in Europe. For example, when I visited rural France I was impressed by the historic stone cottages and patchwork fields, which contrast with Malaysia’s tropical forests and modern skylines.

× In my opinion, I think I prefer views in rural areas.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer views in rural areas.

Type IDs: 26 and 27. The sentence contains redundant subjective phrases 'In my opinion' and 'I think' combined with 'I prefer', making it wordy. Remove 'I think' to avoid repetition and improve clarity. Also ensure subject-verb agreement is maintained; 'I prefer' is correct.

× This is because I find rural areas are more natural, there are more trees and more scenic views compared to urban areas.

✓ This is because I find that rural areas are more natural and have more trees and more scenic views compared to urban areas.

Type ID: 26. The verb 'find' requires a 'that' clause when followed by a full clause ('I find that rural areas...'), or the structure should be adjusted to avoid doubling clauses. Also combine ideas with 'and' and change 'there are' to 'have' to make parallel structure and clearer subject reference.

× Urban areas have different architecture, but I prefer rural areas with rustic buildings.

✓ Urban areas have different architecture, but I prefer rural areas with rustic buildings.

Type ID: 22. This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. Keep as is. Explanation: Article use and word choice are correct; 'different architecture' and 'rustic buildings' are appropriate.

× I have been to Europe before and I really love the views.

✓ I have been to Europe before, and I really love the views there.

Type IDs: 6 and 11. The original is grammatically acceptable, but adding 'there' clarifies that 'the views' refers to Europe. Maintain present perfect 'have been' to indicate experience up to now.

× I love the architecture, I love the nature and I also love the different scenic views, especially their countryside.

✓ I love the architecture and the natural scenery, especially the countryside there.

Type ID: 26 and 12. The original repeats 'I love' three times which is stylistically weak; combine items into a parallel list. Replace 'their countryside' with 'the countryside there' to clearly reference Europe; this avoids ambiguous pronoun use.